Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question more directly and avoid repeating the preference. Replace unnatural phrases such as “plane wise,” “long distance,” and “something for me to just go on the day about.” Use a clear reason and a specific example, connected with linking words. Keep the response to two or three concise sentences.

例: Yes, I prefer a window seat, especially on long-haul flights. I enjoy looking at the scenery from above, and it also gives me something interesting to look at during a four- to six-hour journey.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then explain the situation in a logical order. Avoid repetition and incorrect expressions such as “very, very lots of flights” and “go abroad” when you mean travel to Turkey. Use more natural vocabulary, such as “frequent flights,” “long-distance journeys,” and “to visit my father.”

例: Yes, I did. My father lived in Turkey, so my family and I took frequent flights to visit him when I was a child. The journeys were quite long and sometimes complicated, but they gave us the chance to spend time together.

× If you mean sit by the window as in plane wise, in airplanes, yes, I would love to sit by the window when travelling especially long distance for instance four to six hour flights, I would love that because there would be something for me to just go on the day about.

✓ If you mean sitting by the window on a plane, then yes, I would love to sit by the window when travelling, especially on long-distance flights, such as four- to six-hour flights, because there would be something for me to look at during the flight.

We use the preposition on with public transport such as planes: on a plane or on an airplane. We also use on before a type of journey or flight: on long-distance flights. The phrase in airplanes is possible in some contexts, but on a plane is more natural when describing a passenger's position.

× If you mean sit by the window as in plane wise, in airplanes, yes, I would love to sit by the window when travelling especially long distance for instance four to six hour flights, I would love that because there would be something for me to just go on the day about.

✓ If you mean sitting by the window on a plane, then yes, I would love to sit by the window when travelling, especially on long-distance flights, such as four- to six-hour flights, because there would be something for me to look at during the flight.

The phrase something for me to just go on the day about is not grammatically complete or logically structured. After something for me to, use a suitable base-form verb, such as do, see, or look at. For example, something for me to look at during the flight forms a clear and complete structure.

× Yes, I actually used to have very, very lots of flights because my dad used to live in Turkey so in order for us to be together we would have to go abroad and it was complicated at the time, but yes I had very long journeys with my family as a child.

✓ Yes, I actually used to take a lot of flights because my dad used to live in Turkey, so in order for us to be together, we had to go abroad. It was complicated at the time, but yes, I had very long journeys with my family as a child.

Very cannot be used directly before lots of in this expression. Use a lot of or lots of, or use many with a plural countable noun. The natural expression here is a lot of flights. Remember that a lot of and lots of already express a large quantity and do not need very before them.