Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 질문에 직접 답한 점과 이유를 제시한 점은 좋습니다. 하지만 ‘I loved to sit’은 현재 선호를 말하므로 ‘I love sitting’ 또는 ‘I prefer sitting’이 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한 ‘views like incredibly amazing, beautiful sceneries’는 중복되고 어색하므로 ‘incredible views and beautiful scenery’처럼 간결하게 표현하세요. 두 번째 이유로 넘어갈 때 ‘Also’나 ‘In addition’을 사용하면 연결이 더 자연스럽고, 창가 좌석의 구체적인 장점을 한 가지 추가하면 내용이 더 효과적입니다.

例: Yes, I prefer sitting by the window when I travel because I can enjoy incredible views and beautiful scenery along the way. Also, it gives me something interesting to look at, especially on long journeys. Sometimes, I even chat with the person sitting next to me.

提案: 어린 시절의 경험에 대해 ‘Yes’ 또는 ‘No’로 먼저 명확하게 답한 뒤, 여행 시기와 목적지를 설명하세요. ‘I have longer’는 문법적으로 불완전하므로 ‘I had a long journey’라고 해야 하며, ‘to the Japan’과 ‘to the Tokyo’는 각각 ‘to Japan’과 ‘to Tokyo’로 수정해야 합니다. 과거 경험이므로 ‘go’ 대신 ‘went’, ‘is’ 대신 ‘was’를 일관되게 사용하세요. ‘when I was 14’와 ‘in middle school’은 의미가 겹치므로 하나만 선택하고, 가족과 무엇을 했는지 또는 어떤 점이 인상적이었는지 구체적으로 덧붙이세요.

例: Yes, I did. When I was 14, I went to Tokyo, Japan, with my family during middle school. It was a long journey, but I really enjoyed it because we talked, played games, and looked forward to exploring the city together. It was an amazing experience for me.

× I loved to sit by the window when I'm traveling.

✓ I love to sit by the window when I travel.

The question asks about your general preference, so use the present tense: love. Use travel instead of traveled because you are describing a repeated or general situation, not one specific past journey.

× beautiful sceneries

✓ beautiful scenery

Scenery is an uncountable noun, so it normally does not take the plural ending -s. Use beautiful scenery when referring to attractive views in general.

× incredibly amazing, beautiful sceneries

✓ incredibly beautiful scenery

Incredibly should modify an adjective such as beautiful. Amazing and beautiful are both adjectives, but using both together here is awkward and unnecessarily repetitive. Incredibly beautiful scenery is more natural.

× I I don't know we can count when I was 14, but yeah, I have longer.

✓ I do not know if it counts, but when I was 14, I had a long journey.

The journey happened when you were 14, so use the past tense had rather than the present perfect form have. Also, the phrase I have longer is incomplete and does not clearly express the intended meaning.

× I had long journey

✓ I had a long journey

A singular countable noun such as journey requires an article. Use a because this is one nonspecific journey.

× to the Japan

✓ to Japan

Names of most countries, including Japan, do not use the definite article the. Therefore, say travel to Japan, not travel to the Japan.

× in my middle school at and the time we went to the Tokyo

✓ when I was in middle school, we went to Tokyo

The original phrase contains an incomplete and disorganized sequence of words. Use when I was in middle school to introduce the time and then use a complete clause, we went to Tokyo.

× to the Tokyo

✓ to Tokyo

Tokyo is a city name, and city names generally do not take the definite article the. Say we went to Tokyo.

× it was amazing experience to me

✓ it was an amazing experience for me

Experience is a singular countable noun in this sentence, so it needs an article. Use an before amazing because amazing begins with a vowel sound. The preposition for is also the natural choice when expressing who benefited from or felt something.