Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và trật tự từ; làm câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và mạch lạc (tối đa ~3-4 câu). Cụ thể: (1) dùng thì và chủ ngữ - động từ phù hợp (I prefer / I like); (2) sửa cụm từ không tự nhiên như "take a photo horizon" thành "take photos of the horizon"; (3) thêm liên từ đơn giản để nối ý, ví dụ "because" hoặc "and"; (4) tránh tiếng ừ à (uh) trong bài thi. Ví dụ cách cải thiện: nêu một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó nêu 1-2 chi tiết hỗ trợ ngắn gọn.

例: I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I can take photos of the horizon and enjoy the changing scenery. For example, on long bus trips I like to watch the mountains and fields go by and sometimes I pause to capture a nice view with my camera.

提案: Cải thiện cấu trúc câu quá khứ và từ vựng mô tả; trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi bằng một câu chủ đề ở thì quá khứ (Yes, I did / No, I didn't) rồi bổ sung 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể. Cụ thể: (1) sửa lỗi động từ và thì (When I was a child / I used to travel); (2) dùng động từ đúng (visit, travel) thay vì sai nghĩa; (3) cung cấp chi tiết như thời gian, địa điểm, phương tiện, kỷ niệm cụ thể; (4) giữ độ dài 2-3 câu, tránh lời lẽ rời rạc.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my family often took long trips to visit our hometown by car, usually during summer holidays. I remember we would stop at small roadside restaurants and my parents would tell stories about relatives while we enjoyed the views.

× This I refer to sits by the window when I travel, uh, because I want to take a photo horizon and uh, I enjoy watching the scenery.

✓ I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I want to take photos of the horizon and I enjoy watching the scenery.

Errors identified: subject-verb order, verb form, singular/plural, and preposition use. Correction details: 'This I refer to sits by the window' is incorrect word order; correct phrase is 'I prefer to sit by the window' (verb 'prefer' + infinitive 'to sit'). 'Sits' is wrong because the subject is I, so base form 'sit' after 'to'. 'take a photo horizon' is incorrect: 'take photos of the horizon' uses plural 'photos' (more natural) and preposition 'of' to show what the photos are of. Removed filler 'uh' as not needed in written answer. Suggestion: use correct subject-verb order 'I prefer to...', use infinitive after prefer, use plural for general activities ('photos'), and use preposition 'of' for objects of a photo. Errors mapped to problem types: 27 (Subject-verb agreement/word order), 1 (Singular and plural issue), 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions).

× When I were a driver I sometime to ruin my hometown with my mom or my parents and this is. The.

✓ When I was a child I sometimes went back to my hometown with my mother or my parents.

Errors identified: incorrect tense/person ('were' should be 'was' for singular first person), wrong time expression ('a driver' is incorrect context; likely meant 'a child'), adverb and verb forms ('sometime' should be 'sometimes', and 'to ruin' is wrong verb choice; context suggests 'returned' or 'went back'), and article/fragment at end. Correction details: use 'When I was a child' for past time reference, 'sometimes' as the adverb meaning occasionally, and 'went back to my hometown' to express returning. Use 'my mother' instead of 'my mom' for slightly more formal register or keep 'mom' consistently; 'or my parents' is redundant but kept as offered. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement ('was' with I), choose correct time noun 'child' not 'driver' if meaning childhood journeys, use 'sometimes' for frequency, and use appropriate verb 'went back' or 'returned' to convey travelling home. Errors mapped to problem types: 5 (Past tense issue), 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns/word choice), 1 (Singular and plural issue)