Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify your main idea, correct grammar and vocabulary, and give a brief reason. Keep it natural and under five sentences. Use linking words like because or so to connect ideas. Avoid unclear words like "shan" and "rooms" here.

例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy looking at the scenery. For example, on trains I like watching landscapes and passing towns, which helps me relax and feel less bored.

提案: Use correct past-tense form and give one or two specific details about the trip (where, when, what you remember). If the place name is unusual, spell it clearly and add context. Use linking words like "when" or "because" to make the response coherent.

例: Yes, I did. When I was eight, my family and I took a long trip to Kokochimopolitia, a small coastal town. I remember we spent a week there visiting beaches and local markets, which left me with many happy memories.

× Yes, I really enjoy shan scenery rooms and window

✓ Yes, I really enjoy scenic views and sitting by the window.

The original sentence contains nonstandard words ('shan') and incorrect noun phrases ('scenery rooms and window'). This is an adjective choice and noun phrase formation error. Use the adjective 'scenic' to describe 'views' and a gerund phrase 'sitting by the window' to express the preference. Also ensure parallel structure: 'scenic views and sitting by the window' or better: 'I really enjoy scenic views and sitting by the window.'

× Yes, I did. I have been to Kokochimopolitia with my family when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did. I went to Kokochimopolitia with my family when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present perfect ('have been') with a specific past time expression ('when I was a child'), which is incorrect. Use the simple past 'went' to refer to a completed action at a definite time in the past. If you want to use present perfect, remove the time expression: 'I have been to Kokochimopolitia with my family.'