Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 用更自然和准确的表达替换不恰当或模糊的词语，补充具体细节并注意句子连贯。举例：将 “looking at the wheel” 改为 “looking at the view/scenery”，将 “for small” 删除或改为具体的拍照对象（如 landscapes / cities）。保持回答简洁（不超过5句），用连接词（e.g. and, so, because）使句子更流畅。

例: I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy looking at the scenery and taking photos of interesting places. Also, sitting by the window makes me feel more comfortable, so I can relax and sometimes sleep on long trips.

提案: 时态和细节需更准确，避免模糊表述并给出具体例子。把一般现在时改为过去时（because是过去的经历），并说明去哪里、做什么或印象最深的事情来丰富内容。使用连接词如 “so” 或 “for example” 来增强连贯性。

例: Yes, I often went on long journeys with my family when I was a child. For example, every summer and winter we drove to visit relatives in another city, and I remember enjoying the long car rides because we would sing, play games, and stop at interesting places along the way.

× I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I like looking at the wheel and taking photos for small.

✓ I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I like looking out of the window and taking small photos.

问题类型：动词 + -ing 形式以及短语使用不当。原句中 "looking at the wheel" 不合逻辑，应该是“looking out of the window”或“looking at the view”；此外 "taking photos for small" 结构不正确，可能想表达“拍小东西的照片”或“拍几张小照片”，这里改为 "taking small photos" 更通顺。建议：如果想表达“看风景”，用 look at the view 或 look out of the window；拍照时若强调数量或对象，用 taking a few photos / taking photos of small things。注意保持动词 -ing 形式的一致性。

× Sitting by the window makes me feel more comfortable and I can sleep better.

✓ Sitting by the window makes me feel more comfortable and helps me sleep better.

问题类型：现在时态与句子结构。原句中 "and I can sleep better" 虽然语法可接受，但衔接不够自然，使用 "helps me sleep better" 更简洁并且保留现在时的一致性。建议：在表达因果关系时可用 help + 宾语 + 动词原形，使句子更流畅。

× I often had a long journey with my family when I was a child.

✓ I often went on long journeys with my family when I was a child.

问题类型：过去时态使用。原句使用 "had a long journey" 不太自然，习惯用法是 "go on a journey/journeys" 表示进行旅行；同时因为是反复发生的过去习惯，使用 went on 或 used to go on 更合适。建议：用 "went on long journeys" 或 "used to go on long journeys" 来表达过去经常性的旅行。

× We usually have a long journey each summer and winter for a day.

✓ We usually had a long journey each summer and winter that lasted a day.

问题类型：现在时态与过去习惯不一致。对话上下文在谈论童年经历，应使用过去时。原句中 "have" 应改为过去式 "had"；此外 "for a day" 放在句末略显生硬，改为 "that lasted a day" 更清晰。建议：保持时态一致（与 "when I was a child" 对齐），并用更自然的时间短语表达持续时间。