Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答自然且相关，但可在结构和连贯性上改进：1) 把主题句放在前面更直接（例如 'Yes and no' 或者 'It depends on the trip'），2) 使用明确的衔接词替换“but”以增强逻辑（例如 'however' 或 'on the other hand'），3) 将“air seat”改为更地道的表达如“an aisle seat”，4) 控制句子数量，不超过5句并避免冗长。可以加入一两句具体细节（例如举例说明喜欢看哪些景色或长途飞行上起身的频率）。

例: It depends on the length of the trip. For short journeys I like to sit by the window because I enjoy watching the countryside and cities pass by, especially rivers and mountains. However, on long international flights I prefer an aisle seat so I can get up easily to stretch and use the restroom.

提案: 回答直接且信息明确，但可以更简洁并加入更具体的细节来丰富内容：1) 开头用明确的主题句（例如 'No, not really'），2) 将原因与补充细节用连接词衔接，避免重复，3) 可以补充一两个具体记忆（例如公园里做了什么或一次难忘的短途旅行），4) 控制句数和语言自然度。

例: No, not really. My parents were both busy with work, so we rarely went on long trips when I was a child. Instead, we often spent weekends at a nearby park where I remember feeding ducks and playing on the swings, which felt like a small adventure at the time.

× But on long flights, especially when I'm travelling abroad, I prefer air seat because it's easy to get up and go to the restroom.

✓ But on long flights, especially when I'm travelling abroad, I prefer an aisle seat because it's easy to get up and go to the restroom.

此句中用詞不當：英文中表示“靠走道的座位”應為“aisle seat”，而非“air seat”。此外，因為此處指的是任一個走道座位，需要不定冠詞“an”。建議記住常見座位詞彙（window seat, aisle seat, middle seat）並根據可數名詞使用適當冠詞。

× It depends, if on short trips I prefer to sit by the window because I enjoy watching the landscape pass by.

✓ It depends. On short trips, I prefer to sit by the window because I enjoy watching the landscape pass by.

原句中連接詞和標點使用不當：’It depends, if on short trips...’ 結構不清晰。正確表達應把主句和條件或情況分開，例如用句號分開或改用連詞‘when’。這裡用兩句更清楚：先說‘It depends.’ 然後說明在短途旅行時的偏好。另外注意在時間狀語前加逗號以改善可讀性。

× Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?

✓ Did you have any long journeys with your family as a child?

雖然原問句語法基本可以理解，但更自然的表達是在可數名詞前用複數或加上any來提問經驗：‘long journeys’或者‘any long journey’。若使用過去式疑問句，名詞形式也應與意圖匹配。建議在詢問經驗時使用複數或在單數前加限定詞。

× Sometimes we went to the nearby park on weekends.

✓ Sometimes we went to nearby parks on weekends.

原句說‘the nearby park’暗示只有一個特定公園，但通常多指週末會去附近的公園，使用複數更自然。若真指特定那一個公園，保留定冠詞也可，但語境更常用複數。建議根據語境選擇單數或複數並保持一致。

× They didn't have enough time to take long trips with me, so most of the time I stayed home alone.

✓ They didn't have enough time to take me on long trips, so most of the time I stayed home alone.

‘take long trips with me’ 的說法語義上可理解但不自然。更常見和地道的說法是 ‘take me on long trips’（帶我去長途旅行）。調整動詞搭配和介詞短語能使句子更自然。