Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 用简洁、自然的表达直接回答问题，注意动词和短语的正确使用，避免重复并提供具体原因。可以把句子控制在不超过5句，先给出主题句，然后用一到两个细节支持，并使用连接词使句子连贯。例如说明喜欢窗边的具体感受或看到的景色如何让你放松。

例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because I find it relaxing. When I look into the distance I enjoy watching the changing scenery, which helps me think and unwind. Also, having a view makes long journeys feel shorter.

提案: 直接回答问题并给出清晰的原因，注意时态和搭配（例如“busy with work”而不是“busy with the work”），避免语法错误与冗余。可以补充一两个具体细节，例如偶尔的小旅行或在家做什么，使用连接词保持逻辑。

例: No, I didn't have many long journeys with my family because my parents were usually busy with work. Instead, I spent most weekends at home doing homework or watching TV, and only went on short trips occasionally.

× Yes, I prefer to set up by the window when chatting because it can impede my brain.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when traveling because it helps my mind relax.

原句中有多处用词和短语搭配错误：1) “set up by the window”搭配不当，应该用“sit by the window”表示坐在窗边；2) “when chatting”与上下文不符，题目问的是“travelling”，所以应为“when traveling”；3) “it can impede my brain”表意错误且用词不当，通常说“helps my mind relax”（使我的思绪放松）更自然。建议：注意固定搭配（sit by the window），保持与提问话题一致（travel/traveling），并用恰当的动词表达心理状态（relax, help）。

× My brain feel relaxed when I look the look into the distance.

✓ My brain feels relaxed when I look into the distance.

这是主谓一致和多余词的问题：1) 主语“My brain”为第三人称单数，谓语动词应为“feels”而不是“feel”；2) “look the look into the distance”中有多余和重复的词，应为“look into the distance”或更自然地说“look at the distance / look into the distance”。建议：注意主语和动词在人称和数上的一致性，删除重复词并使用正确短语“look into the distance”。

× No, I didn't have a long journey with my family as a child because my family were usually busy with the work.

✓ No, I didn't have long trips with my family as a child because my family was usually busy with work.

这里有时态与数的一致性和词汇问题：1) “didn't have a long journey”改为复数更自然，表达多次旅行的缺乏可用“didn't have long trips”或“didn't go on long journeys”；2) “my family were”在英式英语中可能可接受，但更常见且一致的表达是将“family”视为单一整体，用单数动词“was”；3) “with the work”中冠词不必要，应为“busy with work”。建议：根据语境选择单数或复数名词（family作整体用单数），并去掉不必要的冠词。

× So I stayed at home, did my homework over the TV when I was a child.

✓ So I stayed at home and did my homework in front of the TV when I was a child.

原句结构和介词使用不当：1) “did my homework over the TV”是不正确的搭配，正确说法是“in front of the TV”或“in front of the television”；2) 在两个并列动作之间用连词“and”更自然；3) 保持时态为过去式“stayed”/“did”。建议：使用正确介词短语“in front of the TV”，用连词连接并列动词以使句子流畅。