Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 内容较直接且相关，但句子较长且有小错误（如“set”应为“seat”），可以更自然、简洁并用连接词使表达更流畅。建议在回答开头先给出简明立场句，然后用一到两句具体原因或例子补充，注意句子连贯与发音清晰。

例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I like looking at the landscape and spotting interesting places along the route, which makes the journey more enjoyable. For example, on a recent train trip I watched mountains and rivers pass by, and it felt relaxing.

提案: 回答展示了记忆点但不完整且有重复（“my favorite thing was my favorite scene was”）并且句子中断，缺乏具体细节和连贯性。建议完成句子，避免重复，用一到两句具体回忆（时间、地点、活动、感受），并用连接词使叙述流畅。

例: Yes, I did. My parents often took me on long trips to places I had never seen before. I especially remember climbing a hill near a seaside village when I was eight — we reached the top at sunset and the view made me feel excited and proud.

× Yes, I do when I travel to a new area, I prefer to choose the set nearby the window because I think it's a good way to enjoy the scenery during the journey.

✓ Yes, I do. When I travel to a new area, I prefer to choose a seat near the window because I think it's a good way to enjoy the scenery during the journey.

问题主要是冠词和词汇搭配错误： 1) 原句中缺少句子分割，导致连成一长句，影响可读性，需在“do.”后加句号并大写“When”。 2) “the set” 使用错误：应为“a seat”。“seat”是座位，且此处表示泛指某一靠窗座位，使用不定冠词“a”。 3) “nearby the window” 搭配不当，正确说法为“near the window”或“by the window”。 改进建议：注意句子断句，核对名词拼写和常见搭配（seat 和 near the window）。保持冠词与名词的搭配正确。

× Yes, I did. When I was a child, my parents often took me to different places where I had never been to.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, my parents often took me to different places where I had never been.

问题是过去时态中介词短语重复和句末多余介词： 1) 原句使用了“where I had never been to”，在正式英语中不需要在‘been’后再加介词‘to’，因为‘where’已包含地点含义。应改为‘where I had never been’。 改进建议：注意避免重复使用地点介词，当从句以where引导时，通常省略后置的‘to’。

× When I was a child my favorite thing was my favorite scene was climbing the

✓ When I was a child, my favorite thing was climbing.

问题为句子结构混乱和残缺： 1) 原句重复短语“my favorite thing was my favorite scene was”，造成冗余且语法错误，应删除重复部分。 2) 句子以“climbing the”结尾，缺少宾语或补足信息，导致不完整。若想表达喜欢爬山或爬树等，可直接说“climbing”或补足对象，如“climbing trees”或“climbing mountains”。 改进建议：整理句子结构，避免重复表达，确保句子完整并给出必要的宾语或使用非限定动名词独立成句（如‘I liked climbing.’）。