Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更自然流畅，句子结构要完整并直接回应问题。可以先给出主题句，然后用1-2个简短句子具体说明原因并用连接词衔接。注意时态和语法（例如“because I like the view”而不是断句），避免冗余。练习把碎片化的想法连成完整句子，例如用“because”、“so”或“therefore”等连接词。

例: Yes, I usually prefer to sit by the window because I enjoy the view. For example, I can watch the landscape change and take photos, so the journey feels more interesting.

提案: 回答需更符合语法和时态，先用一句话直接回答并说明时间背景（例如“when I was a child”），然后补充具体细节。尽量用完整句子并用连接词（例如“because”、“so”或“and”）把理由和感受连起来。提供具体活动或记忆可以提高内容丰富度。

例: Yes, when I was a child my parents took me to Hong Kong for a long trip. I remember visiting theme parks and trying new foods with my family, so I felt very happy and excited.

× Yes, I prefer to sit by the window because I think the view. Behind in window is. Very good.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window because I think the view outside the window is very good.

句子结构混乱，多处短句缺少必要成分。原句“because I think the view.”缺少宾语补足信息；“Behind in window is.”语序错误且用词不当。建议将相关信息合并为完整从句：because I think the view outside the window is very good。这样主句和从句结构完整，语序正确。

× Yes, in my childhood, my parents take me to the Hong Kong.

✓ Yes, in my childhood, my parents took me to Hong Kong.

时态使用错误，描述过去经历应使用一般过去时，动词take应改为过去式took。另外地名前不需要定冠词“the Hong Kong”，因为Hong Kong作地名通常不加冠词。建议将动词改为took并删除“the”。

× I think it's very interesting.

✓ I think it was very interesting.

句子时态与上下文不一致。前句谈论过去的经历，应使用过去时态，故把it’s（现在时）改为it was（过去时）。

× And play with my family.

✓ I played with my family.

这是不完整的片段，缺主语和正确时态。应改为完整句子“I played with my family.”以符合过去时背景并包含主语。

× I'm very happy.

✓ I was very happy.

时态不一致。前文在叙述过去的经历，感受也应使用过去时态，因此将现在时“I'm”改为过去时“I was”。