Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答很自然，信息也很充实，但可以稍作精简並加入一個清晰的主題句及一個連接詞來提升連貫性。例如開頭直接表明立場，然後用連詞（like, because, so）連接理由，並避免重複（comfortable 和 private 可合併或選一個）。此外，注意時態和一致性（例如描述習慣用一般現在時）。

例: I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the changing scenery. For example, I can take photos or videos of interesting views, and it’s also more private, so I find it easier to relax or take a nap.

提案: 回答在時態和邏輯上有明顯錯誤與不完整。題目問的是童年（child），但你說“about 20 years old”，造成語義不一致；句子也有語法錯誤（如混用時態、不完整句尾），並且細節模糊。建議：1) 使用正確年齡表述（childhood/when I was a child/when I was X years old）；2) 用一個主題句回答（Yes/No），接著用兩到三個具體細節支持（去哪裡、跟誰、花了多久、感受）；3) 注意句子完整與連接詞（because/so/and）。

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my family took a long trip to Guangzhou to visit relatives, and the trip lasted about a week. I remember feeling excited because I could see a big city for the first time and meet many cousins, so it was a memorable experience.

× Yes, I did. When I was about 20 years old, my family took me on a long trip to Guangzhou during the school holidays, where we visit the relatives who lived far away, so the general it would take about a week. I remember feeling excited to see new place and.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was about 20 years old, my family took me on a long trip to Guangzhou during the school holidays, where we visited relatives who lived far away, so generally it took about a week. I remember feeling excited to see new places.

问题类型：过去时态错误（Past tense issue）。 解释（简体中文）：句子中叙述的是过去发生的事情，因此动词应使用过去式。原句中“we visit”是现在时，应该改为过去时“we visited”。“the general it would take about a week”结构不自然，需改为一般过去时“generally it took about a week”或更简洁的“so generally it took about a week”。此外“new place”应为复数“new places”或加冠词“a new place”。建议：描述过去事件时，全文统一使用过去时；去掉多余词（如多余的“it”），并注意名词单复数一致。