Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 用更自然、准确的表达来减少错误和重复，同时注意发音与词汇选择。回答要直接开门见山（主题句），然后用一到两句具体细节支持。避免拼写/发音错误（如“see”、“IOC”应为“seat”与“aisle”）。可以用连接词使逻辑更流畅，例如“because”、“so”、“for example”。句子尽量不超过五句。

例: I prefer the aisle seat because I'm 174 cm tall and need extra legroom. Sitting on the aisle lets me stretch my legs and makes long trips much more comfortable. I know some people like the window seat for the view, but comfort matters more to me.

提案: 保持回答简洁并注意语法与搭配，使用更准确的时态和名词复数形式。先用一句话直接回答，然后用一到两句具体细节说明（行程时长、活动、感受或具体例子）。避免重复词汇（例如“we we”），注意词汇拼写和搭配（“tour sites”而非“tour site”）。

例: Yes, I did. The longest trip was a 16-hour flight to Toronto with my family. It was enjoyable because we visited many local attractions and tried new foods like poutine, which was delicious.

× No, I actually prefer the aisle seat because I'm one hundred and seventy four centimeters tall so I do have really long legs.

✓ No, I actually prefer the aisle seat because I'm one hundred and seventy-four centimeters tall, so I do have really long legs.

句子中数字复合形容身高时用连字符连接（one hundred and seventy-four），并且复合句在两个分句之间需要逗号以清晰连接原因关系。建议养成书写连字符和在复合句中用逗号的习惯以提高表达准确性。

× Sitting by the aisle allows me to have more leg room and make the traveling experience a lot more comfortable.

✓ Sitting by the aisle allows me to have more legroom and makes the travelling experience a lot more comfortable.

“leg room”应写作一个词 legroom；主语是“Sitting by the aisle”，这是单数行为，后面动词应与主语一致，使用第三人称单数 makes。因此需要把 make 改为 makes，并把 travelling 的拼写统一（英式：travelling）。建议注意名词合成词的写法及主谓一致。

× I understand why other people will like the window see because you get to see the view, but for me the IOC is the way to go.

✓ I understand why other people would like the window seat, because you get to see the view, but for me the aisle is the way to go.

原句有多处问题：1) 时态/语气用法不当，表达习惯上用 would like 比较自然（Grammar Problem Type 4/6，但按要求仅列出主要类型，归为句子结构问题）；2) “window see”是拼写/词汇错误，应为 window seat；3) “IOC”应为 aisle（拼写错误或听写误写）。整体属于句子结构和词汇错误，需要改为通顺的表达。建议核对单词拼写并注意用 would like 表达偏好。

× Yes, my family and I we do travel a lot.

✓ Yes, my family and I do travel a lot.

原句中出现了主语重复 “my family and I we”，属于句子结构错误并造成主语重复。应去掉多余的代词“we”。建议说话时注意不要重复主语。

× The longest journey I had with them was when we traveled to Toronto, Canada.

✓ The longest journey I had with them was when we traveled to Toronto, Canada.

句子时态使用为过去时（had, traveled），语法正确，无需更改。此处仅确认为符合题目时态要求。

× The whole journey was about sixteen hour flight and it was very enjoyable because we got to see a lot of local tour site and try a lot of new food such as poutine.

✓ The whole journey was about a sixteen-hour flight, and it was very enjoyable because we got to see a lot of local tourist sites and try a lot of new food such as poutine.

错误包括：1) “sixteen hour”作为复合数词修饰名词时需加连字符并用单数名词形式 a sixteen-hour flight；2) 缺少冠词 a；3) “tour site”用词不当，应为 tourist site(s) 或 tourist attractions；4) 复数一致用 sites。建议注意复合形容词连字符、冠词使用和常见搭配（tourist site/attraction）。