Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 全体として意味は伝わりますが、文法と語彙選択、流暢さで改善できます。具体的には： 1) 文法と語順："prefer setting a window seat than aisle seat" は不自然です。正しくは "prefer a window seat to an aisle seat" や "prefer sitting by the window to sitting in the aisle" のように表現します。 2) 不要な言い直しと間投詞の削減："uh" や繰り返し（"I usually" が2回）を減らして流暢さを高めてください。 3) 詳細の具体化：どのような景色が好きか（山、海、街並みなど）や理由（写真を撮る、外を見ていると退屈しない等）を一つ付け加えると説得力が増します。 4) 文の長さと構成：回答は最大5文に収め、最初に直接答え（トピック文）を示し、その後に理由と具体例を1〜2文でつなげてください。

例: Yes, I prefer a window seat to an aisle seat. I enjoy looking at the scenery through the window, especially coastlines and mountains. For example, on trains I often take photos of changing landscapes, and on planes I like watching the clouds because it helps me relax.

提案: 意味は伝わりますが、発音・文法・明瞭さに多く改善点があります。具体的には： 1) 語順と語の選択："with my family member such as a family type" は不自然です。単に "with my family" で十分です。 2) 時制と詳細の明確化："we fly to Hawaii by April" は時制と前置詞が間違っています。過去の出来事なら "we flew to Hawaii in April" のように表現します。 3) 不要な繰り返しの削減："It's it's too cold" のような繰り返しは削除し、正確な情報（寒かったのか暑かったのか）を述べてください。ハワイは通常寒くないので、ここは内容の見直しが必要です。 4) 具体例の追加：旅の印象的な出来事やアクティビティ（ビーチで泳いだ、家族で観光した等）を1文加えると回答が豊かになります。 5) 文の整理：最初に直接答え、その後に時期、所要時間、印象的な点の順で話すと分かりやすいです。

例: Yes, I did. I flew to Hawaii with my family when I was a child; we went in April and the flight took about eight and a half hours. I remember spending a lot of time on the beach with my parents, and the warm weather and clear sea made it a wonderful trip.

× Yes I do, I prefer setting a window seat than aisle seat because uh, during a tour trip, especially in the train and aircraft, I usually enjoy a landscape from window. So if I had the chance I usually buy a ticket at window seat.

✓ Yes, I do. I prefer a window seat to an aisle seat because, on trips by train or plane, I usually enjoy the view from the window. So if I have the chance I usually buy a ticket for a window seat.

The main issue is incorrect use of the verb + -ing form 'setting' where a noun phrase 'a window seat' is required; this matches 'Verb + -ing form' problems when a gerund is used incorrectly. Also corrected related article and preposition errors for grammaticality. Suggestions: use the noun phrase 'a window seat' rather than 'setting a window seat', use 'prefer A to B' structure, use 'on trips by train or plane' and 'the view from the window', and use present simple consistently ('if I have the chance I usually buy').

× Yes I did. I went to Hawaii with my family member such as a family type. So I we fly to Hawaii by April. It's it's too cold, 8 hours and 30 minutes flight. So it was a wonderful time for me.

✓ Yes, I did. I went to Hawaii with my family. We flew to Hawaii in April. It was an eight-hour, thirty-minute flight, which was tiring because it was cold, but overall it was a wonderful time for me.

Multiple pronoun and sentence-structure issues: 'my family member such as a family type' is incorrect and should be 'my family' (use a plural collective noun rather than singular 'member' and delete vague phrase). 'So I we fly' mixes pronouns and tenses; correct to 'We flew' (past tense). Also clarified time expression 'in April' and corrected the duration to 'an eight-hour, thirty-minute flight'. Suggestions: use consistent pronouns ('we' for group actions), use simple past for completed trips, and express durations with hyphenated compounds when used as adjectives.