Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говоря об этом вопросе, вам нужно использовать правильные времена и избежать повторов. Начните с чёткого утверждения (topic sentence), затем приведите 1–2 конкретных причины или примера, используя связки (for example, because, especially). Следите за грамматикой: не говорите «got to the travelling» — лучше «when travelling»; не повторяйте фразы («I prefer I always prefer»). Уместно использовать простые связки, чтобы ответ был плавным и логичным.

例: Yes, I usually prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I enjoy the scenery because it helps me relax and pass the time, especially on trains and planes, where the landscape can be really beautiful. For example, I like watching mountains and rivers when taking long train rides.

提案: Ответ должен быть структурирован: сначала кратко подтвердите, затем расскажите один конкретный пример поездки, уточните детали (куда, с кем, когда, что запомнилось) и используйте связки (for example, when, which). Избегайте грамматических ошибок (например, «China's» → «China»; «my memory along Jordan got to the UK» — непонятно; лучше: «I remember going to the UK with my family»). Старайтесь быть конкретнее и лаконичнее, не смешивайте несколько мыслей в одно предложение.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child my family took several long trips abroad. For example, we visited Japan, China and the UK; I especially remember a visit to the UK because we toured London and saw many museums, which left a strong impression on me.

× I prefer to sit by the window when I got to the travelling because the view is very beautiful for me, especially when I go to the train or travel by plane. So I prefer I always prefer

✓ I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because the view is very beautiful, especially when I take the train or travel by plane. I always prefer it.

The student mixes past tense 'got' with the habitual present 'prefer'. Use simple present 'travel' for general preferences and 'take the train' for idiomatic expression. Remove redundant words 'to the travelling' and repeated 'I prefer'. Suggestion: use simple present for routines and habits (I travel, I prefer), and common collocations (take the train).

× When I was a child we went to the different countries with my family like Japan and China's and the UK so and my memory along Jordan got to the UK with my family

✓ When I was a child, we went to different countries with my family, such as Japan, China and the UK. I remember going to the UK with my family.

The original mixes incorrect plurals and possessive forms ('China's'), wrong word order, and unclear phrasing ('my memory along Jordan got to the UK'). Use past simple 'went' for completed past actions and 'remember' + gerund 'going' to describe a memory. Remove 'the' before 'different countries' and correct country names. Make sentence two clear: 'I remember going to the UK with my family.'