Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix grammar and avoid redundant phrases. Mention concrete examples (types of views, what photos you take) and correct word choice (e.g., 'lens', 'photos').

例: Yes, I usually prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I like watching the scenery pass by, especially landscapes or city skylines, and I often take photos through the window to share with friends.

提案: Provide a clearer structure: open with a direct topic sentence, then give specific details (where in Japan, activities, why it was memorable) using linking words to connect ideas. Correct run-on sentences and add one or two precise details to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, when I was ten I went to Japan with my parents for about a week. We visited Tokyo and Kyoto, tried local food, and saw famous temples, which created many happy memories; we also took lots of photos to remember the trip.

× Yes, I prefer sitting by the window when travelling because This sitting by the window represents I can appreciate the views outside the windows and I can take a photo of Len and share Los Pictures with my friends.

✓ Yes, I prefer sitting by the window when travelling because it allows me to appreciate the views outside and take photos to share with my friends.

The sentence is wordy and uses incorrect phrases. 'This sitting by the window represents' is unnatural; use a clause with 'allows' plus base verb. 'Appreciate the views outside the windows' should be 'appreciate the views outside' for concision and correct article use. 'I can take a photo of Len and share Los Pictures' contains probable typo and unnecessary capitalization; replace with 'take photos to share with my friends'. Use of 'prefer sitting' is acceptable (Verb + -ing form). Keep tense present simple to match habitual preference.

× Yes. When I was ten years old, I went to Japan with my parents and we spent at least one week in Japan I created a lot of memories with my parents also we took a lot of pictures

✓ Yes. When I was ten years old, I went to Japan with my parents and we spent at least one week there. I made a lot of memories with my parents, and we also took many pictures.

Run-on and punctuation errors plus word choice. Use past simple consistently for completed past events ('went', 'spent', 'made', 'took'). 'I created a lot of memories' is grammatically possible but 'made a lot of memories' is more natural. Add a period after 'week in Japan' or replace repetition with 'there'. Add conjunction 'and' with comma for clarity and use 'many pictures' instead of 'a lot of pictures' for smoother phrasing.