Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: حاول تنظيم إجابتك بشكل أوضح مع جملة موضوعية ترد مباشرة على السؤال، وتقليل التكرار وتصحيح الأخطاء النحوية واللفظية. استخدم روابط منطقية عند إضافة تفاصيل (مثل "because" أو "so") واذكر أمثلة محددة ومناسبة (مثل مشاهد طبيعية أو نشاطات تقوم بها أثناء الجلوس بجانب النافذة). لا تتجاوز 3-4 جمل كاملة وواضحة.

例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because I enjoy watching the scenery change. For example, on long bus trips I like to look at fields and towns passing by, which helps me relax and feel connected to the place. Sometimes I also take photos when the view is especially beautiful.

提案: حاول تقديم إجابة مباشرة ثم تفاصيل محددة وواضحة مع تقليل الترددات (مثل "uh") والأخطاء النحوية. استخدم روابط لإظهار التسلسل أو السبب (مثل "because", "for example", "so") واذكر مثالاً واحداً مفصلاً بدلاً من عبارات عامة مبهمة. التزم بعدد جمل معقول (2–4 جمل).

例: Yes, I often had long car journeys with my family when I was a child. For example, we used to drive several hours to visit relatives in the countryside, and during the trip we would play games, sing songs and stop at small towns to try local food. Those trips were a memorable way to spend time together.

× I must always make a point of starting staring out of the window whenever I am on a bus or in car or whatever.

✓ I always make a point of starting to stare out of the window whenever I am on a bus or in a car or whatever.

The verb phrase 'make a point of' should be followed by a gerund (verb+ing) or 'starting to' before an infinitive; 'starting staring' is incorrect because two verb forms are concatenated. Use 'starting to stare' or simply 'staring'. Also add the article 'a' before 'car'. Suggestion: say 'I always make a point of staring out of the window' or 'I make a point of starting to stare out of the window.'

× Specially on longer trips around around my city or around my country.

✓ Especially on longer trips around my city or around my country.

The word 'Specially' is misspelled; use 'Especially'. The repeated 'around' is redundant. 'Around my city' and 'around my country' are correct prepositional phrases; remove the duplicate. Suggestion: 'Especially on longer trips around my city or my country.'

× There is something about watching the landscape roll by our weather.

✓ There is something about watching the landscape roll by, whatever the weather.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing: 'our weather' does not make sense in context. Likely intended meaning is that watching the landscape is enjoyable regardless of the weather. Rephrase to 'whatever the weather' and add a comma. Suggestion: 'There is something about watching the landscape roll by, whatever the weather.'

× It is drip lanes or.

✓ It is dreamlike, or something like that.

The fragment 'It is drip lanes or.' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely speaker attempted a colloquial filler such as 'it is dreamy' or 'drifting along'. Provide a coherent alternative: 'It is dreamlike, or something like that.' Suggestion: avoid fragments and finish the thought.

× I think it was a fun way to explore new places with my parents, uh, like going to nearby parks or visited relative to explore, uh, something new, uh, by doing a lot of things in the long way.

✓ I think it was a fun way to explore new places with my parents, like going to nearby parks or visiting relatives to explore something new by taking the long way.

The sentence mixes gerund and past forms incorrectly: 'visited relative' should be 'visiting relatives'. Use parallel gerund forms after 'like' ('going', 'visiting'). 'By doing a lot of things in the long way' is awkward; 'by taking the long way' is idiomatic. Suggestion: use parallel verb forms and idiomatic phrases: 'going to nearby parks or visiting relatives' and 'taking the long way.'

× whenever I am on a bus or in car or whatever.

✓ whenever I am on a bus or in a car or whatever.

The phrase 'in car' is missing the indefinite article 'a'. Use 'in a car'. Also keep parallel structure: 'on a bus or in a car.' Suggestion: always include articles with singular, countable nouns when needed.

× Yes, when I was a kid, I really loved traveling by car, especially with my, uh, family.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, I really loved traveling by car, especially with my family.

This sentence is fine grammatically but contains filler 'uh' and an unnecessary comma before 'family'. Remove fillers and the comma for fluency: 'especially with my family.' Suggestion: avoid filler words and superfluous punctuation in spoken responses.