Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words (‘like’, repeating ‘travelling’). Improve vocabulary by using phrases such as ‘so I can enjoy the scenery’ or ‘it helps me relax’.

例: Yes, I prefer a window seat because I can enjoy the scenery and relax during the journey. For example, when I travel by train I like watching the changing landscape, which makes long trips feel shorter.

提案: Clarify meaning and correct grammar. Begin with a simple past sentence to answer directly, then add a specific detail (where you went, how long, who was there). Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’ correctly. Avoid unclear words and wrong verb tenses.

例: Yes, I had several long journeys with my family when I was a child. For example, we often travelled to visit my aunts who lived far away, and each trip took about six hours by car, so we usually packed snacks and played games to pass the time.

× I do prefer to sit in a window while I'm travelling because I would like to enjoy the view while I'm travelling and it's the best like time it's the best way to enjoy your journey, I think so.

✓ I prefer to sit by the window when I'm travelling because I like to enjoy the view; it's the best way to enjoy the journey, I think.

Errors: redundant use of 'do' with present simple preference and repeated phrases. Use 'prefer' (present simple) not 'do prefer' unless for emphasis. Use correct preposition 'by the window' not 'in a window'. Avoid repetition: combine clauses and remove filler 'like'. Suggestions: use concise present simple for habits (I prefer, I like), correct preposition 'by', and punctuate to separate ideas. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, I do have a very longest journey Swani used to be a child because all the aunts I used to live very long away from where do I live. So yeah I do spend very long drinks.

✓ Yes, I had very long journeys when I was a child because all my aunts used to live far from where I lived, so I spent a lot of time travelling.

Errors: wrong tense and form. Use past simple 'had' and 'spent' for past events, not 'do have' or 'do spend'. 'Very longest' is incorrect; use 'very long' or 'the longest' with context. 'Used to be a child' should be 'when I was a child'. 'All the aunts I used to live very long away from where do I live' has incorrect pronouns, word order and prepositions; correct to 'all my aunts used to live far from where I lived'. 'Drinks' is incorrect word choice; likely 'journeys' or 'time travelling'—here corrected to 'time travelling'. Suggestions: use past simple for past habits, 'used to' for past repeated states, correct word order, possessive 'my aunts', and appropriate nouns ('time', 'journeys'). Grammar problem type ID:5