Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and relevant, with clear reason and feelings. To improve, make sentences more concise, correct small errors (e.g., “window seat” not “window set”), and add one specific example to make the response more vivid. Use a linking word when adding the example to keep coherence.

例: Yes, I always prefer a window seat when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery outside, such as cities, rivers and cloud formations. For example, last summer I flew over the coast and watched the sunlight ripple on the sea, which made the trip much more enjoyable.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors, repetitions ("spend spend"), and unclear phrasing ("going out for living"). Improve by using a clear topic sentence, correct tenses, and a brief explanation with one specific detail or feeling. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid overlong or vague statements.

例: No, I didn’t have many long journeys with my family when I was a child because my parents worked long hours. As a result, we rarely went on trips together, which was disappointing for me at the time.

× I prefer the window set when I travel because I can see the scenery and the landscape outside like the cities, clouds and some other beautiful things.

✓ I prefer the window seat when I travel because I can see the scenery and the landscape outside, such as cities, clouds, and other beautiful things.

The main problem is word choice: 'window set' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'window seat' (preposition/word choice). Also 'like the cities' is awkward for listing examples; use 'such as' or 'for example'. Add a comma before the list and adjust punctuation. Suggestion: use 'window seat' and 'such as' when giving examples.

× Well, I guess no, because when I was a child my parents were going out for living and they didn't spend spend too much time with me and it's a little pity but I can't understand this.

✓ Well, I guess no, because when I was a child my parents were out working to make a living and they didn't spend much time with me, which is a pity, but I couldn't understand it at the time.

Multiple tense and wording errors: 'were going out for living' is ungrammatical — use 'were out working to make a living' or 'worked to make a living' (past continuous or simple past). The repeated 'spend spend' is an error; correct to 'didn't spend'. 'It's a little pity' is incorrect; use 'which is a pity' or 'it was a pity'. 'I can't understand this' should match past perspective: 'I couldn't understand it at the time.' Suggestions: use clear past tense forms for past events, remove duplicated words, and use natural collocations like 'make a living' and 'which is a pity'.