Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答题要更直接并简洁，用一到两句概括观点，然后用1-2句提供具体原因或例子。注意语法（例如时态、主谓一致）和重复词的删减，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。可以把“be more quiet”改为“have more privacy/peace and quiet”，并把“is no people beside me”改为“there are no people beside me”。

例: Yes, I usually prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I enjoy having privacy and the peace and quiet it brings, and if there’s no one beside me I feel more comfortable and secure.

提案: 回答要直接回应“作为孩子”这个时间点。如果当真没有童年长途旅行，可以先明确说没有，然后补充后来（青少年或成年）的相关经历。注意时态（过去式），去掉重复词，并增加细节（时间、地点、同行者、活动）以使内容更具体。

例: No, I didn’t have any long journeys with my family when I was a child. However, when I was seventeen I travelled to Japan with my cousin and sister, and we spent two weeks exploring Tokyo and Kyoto, which was a memorable trip.

× I do cause I like to be alone and be more quiet but if I if I sit by the window is no people beside me so I will feel more safe and quiet and comfortable.

✓ I do, because I like to be alone and quieter. If I sit by the window and there are no people beside me, I feel safer, quieter and more comfortable.

问题包含多个语法点： 1) 连词与因果表达错误（对应题目中的“Incorrect use of conjunction / Sentence structure errors”）：原句用“cause”口语化且结构混乱，建议用 because 并用逗号分隔从句。 2) 形容词/副词比较级错误（对应“Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs”）：原句用“be more quiet”不自然，应该用比较级形容词“quieter”或副词“more quietly”（此处描述状态用形容词）。 3) 主谓一致与 there be 结构（对应“Subject-verb agreement errors / There be issue”）：原句“If I sit by the window is no people beside me”缺少主语和正确的 there be 结构，正确表达为“If I sit by the window and there are no people beside me”或“If there are no people sitting beside me”。 4) 冗余与流畅性：原句重复“if I if I”，有啰嗦，需简化。 改进建议：说话时注意连词的正确使用（use because for reasons），用比较级表述比较（quieter / safer），使用完整的 there are 结构表达“有/没有某人”，句子间用标点或连词分隔，避免重复。

× Actually I didn't, but I remember that when I was seventeen I go to Japan with my with my cousin and my sister.

✓ Actually I didn't, but I remember that when I was seventeen I went to Japan with my cousin and my sister.

问题为时态错误（Past tense issue）：主句回忆过去的经历（when I was seventeen），所以动作动词应使用过去时。原句用 present tense 的 go，不符合时间背景。 改进建议：在描述过去发生的动作时使用过去式（went），并注意去掉重复词汇（如原句中“with my with my”）。