Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子语法和表达不够准确，有重复信息且缺少连接词。可以把回答分成主题句和补充细节，使用正确的时态和代词，避免多余词汇，并用连接词使逻辑更连贯。例如，把“I traveling”改为“I’m travelling”或“when I travel”，将“sitting near the windows I can relax”调整为原因从句。

例: Yes, I usually prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery. For example, when I fly or take a train, I can relax and look outside, which makes the journey more enjoyable.

提案: 回答语法混乱，时态不一致，信息重复且不够具体。应先用明确的主题句回答（如“Yes, I did”或“No, I didn’t”），然后提供具体细节并使用恰当时态（过去时）。减少语音填充词（umm），使用连接词组织细节，例如描述时间、地点、活动和感受。

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my family and I took a long trip to Shanghai. We visited several attractions, tried local food and spent about a week there, which was a very memorable experience.

× Yeah, I prefer sitting by the window when I traveling because I enjoy the travel and sitting near the windows I can relax.

✓ Yeah, I prefer sitting by the window when I travel because I enjoy the journey and sitting near the window I can relax.

问题类型：动词 + -ing 形式以及动词时态和名词使用不当。解释（简体中文）： 1) 原句中 “when I traveling” 动词形式错误，should 用动词原形 travel 或者用进行时搭配助动词（am travelling）。正确用法是 “when I travel” 表示一般情况下的习惯。建议：在表示习惯动作时用一般现在时（I travel）。 2) “the travel” 用词不自然，常用名词是 “the journey” 或 “traveling/travel” 不带定冠词更常见。建议用 “the journey” 或 “traveling”。 3) “windows” 与前文的 “the window” 不一致，且靠窗位通常说 “by the window” 或 “near the window”。建议保持单数一致。

× Yeah, we when I was a child, umm, I and with my family, we go to the city, the city name is Shanghai.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, my family and I went to a city; the city's name is Shanghai.

问题类型：句子结构错误。解释（简体中文）： 1) 原句词序混乱（“we when I was a child, … I and with my family”），需要先交代时间状语“when I was a child”，再说明主语和动作。建议将时间状语置于句首或句尾，主语为 “my family and I”。 2) 时态不一致，描述过去经历应使用一般过去时，所以“go”应改为“went”。 3) 关于城市名称的表达更自然的说法是 “the city's name is Shanghai” 或直接 “we went to Shanghai”。 4) 建议把句子简化为两个更流畅的句子。

× We go to the Shanghai and we'll enjoy the traveling.

✓ We went to Shanghai and enjoyed the trip.

问题类型：过去时问题。解释（简体中文）： 1) 原句在叙述过去经历时错误地使用了一般现在时 “go” 和将来时 “we'll enjoy”，应全部使用一般过去时来描述已经发生的事情：用 “went” 和 “enjoyed”。 2) “the Shanghai” 中不需要定冠词，应直接说 “Shanghai”。 3) “traveling” 用法可以改为更地道的名词 “trip” 或 “journey”。建议：叙述过去经历时统一使用一般过去时，并注意地名不加定冠词。