Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Pronunciation and word choice need correction (e.g., 'towering' → 'travelling'; 'by the airport' → 'on a plane' or 'when flying'). Reduce hesitations and filler words (umm). Use a clear topic sentence and one or two concise supporting reasons linked smoothly. Be specific about what you like to see from the window. Keep to 2–3 sentences to avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I usually prefer a window seat when I travel. It feels more comfortable and I enjoy watching the landscape or city views pass by, which helps me relax during the journey.

提案: Structure your response with a clear topic sentence, then add a specific detail or memory. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'I opted to travel' and redundant clauses. Use linking words (for example, 'for example,' 'because') to make the answer coherent. Mention a concrete detail about Chiang Mai to make the answer vivid.

例: Yes, I often went on long trips with my family during summer. For example, we travelled to Chiang Mai, where I remember visiting ancient temples and tasting local food, which made the trip very memorable.

× Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when towering.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when travelling.

The verb 'towering' is incorrect in context. The intended meaning is 'travelling.' The error is using a wrong verb form/word. Use 'travelling' (verb + -ing) to indicate the action of travel.

× Actually when I travel by bus or by the airport, I would like to sit by the window because it's convenient for me and I can looking for the umm FBGS scenery.

✓ Actually, when I travel by bus or by plane, I like to sit by the window because it's convenient for me and I can look at the scenery.

Multiple issues: 'by the airport' is incorrect preposition/collocation (use 'by plane' or 'on a plane'), and 'would like' is unnecessary when stating a habitual preference (use present simple 'like'). 'Can looking' mixes modal/can with a gerund incorrectly; use base form 'look' after 'can'. Also 'look at the scenery' is the correct collocation. Remove filler 'umm FBGS' or replace with 'the'.

× Yes, I did when I was a child, I opted to travel with my family with a long journey in the summer, my family had to travel to the northern part of Thailand like a Chiang Mai is uh, very interesting for me that.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, I often went on long journeys with my family in the summer; we traveled to the northern part of Thailand, such as Chiang Mai, which was very interesting to me.

Problems include awkward tense and phrasing. Use simple past 'went'/'traveled' for habitual past actions. 'Opted to travel with my family with a long journey' is incorrect structure; replace with 'went on long journeys with my family'. 'Like a Chiang Mai is uh' is incorrect grammar and punctuation; use 'such as Chiang Mai' and a relative clause 'which was very interesting to me.' Also split into clearer sentences and remove fillers.