Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答总体可以理解，但存在语法和表达不够自然的问题。建议注意时态和主谓一致（例如“take a plane”应为“took a plane”在过去；本题应为一般现在时可说“I enjoy the view”，不要说“video”除非指看视频）。句子尽量简洁，最多五句；使用连接词如“so”, “because”, “especially”来衔接，并提供更具体的细节（例如喜欢拍摄什么类型的照片，窗外常见的景色）。练习时可以把回答分成主题句+一到两句具体细节。

例: Yes, I prefer sitting by the window when I travel because it feels more private and relaxing. I enjoy watching the scenery change, especially during sunrise, and I often take photos of landscapes and clouds through the glass. Sometimes I also like to read or listen to music while looking outside, so the journey feels more enjoyable.

提案: 回答时态和语法错误较多，应使用过去时描述童年经历（例如“we took a plane”）。避免模糊的句子（如“everything is better”），应具体说明为什么觉得更好（例如气候温暖、海滩、好吃的海鲜等）。控制在最多五句内，并用连接词如“because”, “so”, “for example”使回答更连贯。可以加入一两个具体回忆来丰富内容。

例: Yes, when I was a child my parents and I took a plane to a coastal city for a holiday. The weather was much milder there, and I remember playing on the sandy beaches and collecting shells. We also enjoyed fresh seafood at small restaurants, so it felt like a very relaxing trip.

× Yes, while I was a child, my parents and I take a plane to a coastal city.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, my parents and I took a plane to a coastal city.

问题类型对应：5（Past tense issue）和27（Subject-verb agreement errors）。 解释（简体中文）：句子在表达过去的经历时，应使用过去时态。原句中先用了“while I was a child”（表示过去），但后半句使用现在时的“take”，时态不一致，应该改为过去式“took”。另外，“while I was a child”在口语中也可以用“when I was a child”更自然，故作此改。建议：描述过去经历时，整句话保持过去时，注意将动词变为过去式。

× There is temperature is more comfortable and the sky, the road, the garden, everything is better.

✓ The temperature was more comfortable, and the sky, the roads, and the gardens were all nicer.

问题类型对应：26（Sentence structure errors）、6（Present tense issue，因原句时态混乱）和1（Singular and plural issue，road/garden用复数更自然）。 解释（简体中文）：原句有结构问题和时态混用：开头多余的“There is”，且前文为过去情境，应使用过去时“was”。另外列举事物时用复数（roads, gardens）或保持一致的单复数形式更自然。最后用“nicer”或“better”需与过去时态一致。建议：删除多余的“There is”，统一为过去时，并注意名词单复数一致，列举项保持并列形式。

× Yes I do, I prefer sitting by the window because it feels more private and relaxing and I can enjoy the video.

✓ Yes, I do. I prefer sitting by the window because it feels more private and relaxing, and I can enjoy the view.

问题类型对应：8（Verb + -ing form）和13（Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs）及11（Incorrect use of prepositions，词汇误用）。 解释（简体中文）：句子中“enjoy the video”用词不当，应为“enjoy the view”（欣赏景色）。另外逗号和句子连贯性可以改进：将复合句分为两句或用逗号连接。动名词“sitting”用法是正确的，所以不改变，但要修正搭配用词。建议：注意固定搭配 like/enjoy + 名词（view, film/video语境不同），并改善标点使句子更清晰。