Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but could be more natural and slightly more concise. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add a brief reason using a linking word. Avoid repeating similar words (e.g., "long distance traveling" and "long distance") and correct small grammar issues (say "on long-distance trips" or "when the journey is long").

例: I usually choose my seat based on the length of the trip. For flights under five hours, I prefer an aisle seat so I can move around easily; however, on long-distance trips I like a window seat because I can sleep and enjoy the view.

提案: Your answer gives useful information but needs clearer structure and improved grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then use linking words to connect details. Combine short fragments into complete sentences and be specific (e.g., "we flew back to Japan once a year; the flights took about 14 hours").

例: Yes, we often had long journeys when I was a child. I lived in the United States from ages five to eleven, and my family flew back to Japan once a year; the flight usually took about fourteen hours.

× It depends on the situation.

✓ It depends on the situation.

No change needed. The sentence is grammatically correct and uses adjectives/adverbs properly. Keep as is.

× For example, for flights less than five hours I sit by the aisle, but on long distance traveling where it takes time, I prefer the window.

✓ For example, for flights of less than five hours I sit in the aisle seat, but on long-distance trips that take a long time, I prefer the window seat.

Multiple preposition and noun-choice issues: use 'flights of less than five hours' (correct preposition and expression), 'sit in the aisle seat' (we normally say 'in the aisle seat' rather than 'by the aisle'), and 'long-distance trips' is the correct compound adjective plus noun; 'traveling' as a noun is better expressed as 'trips' here. Also specify 'window seat'. Suggestion: use 'of' with durations, hyphenate compound adjectives, and choose appropriate nouns for clarity.

× Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?

✓ Did you have a long journey with your family when you were a child?

The original is understandable but 'as a child' is acceptable; however 'when you were a child' is more natural in conversational past context. Use past tense auxiliary 'Did' with a clear time clause 'when you were a child' for clarity.

× Yes, I did.

✓ Yes, I did.

No change needed. This short answer correctly uses past tense and is appropriate.

× I lived in the United States from five to eleven.

✓ I lived in the United States from when I was five until I was eleven.

The original phrase 'from five to eleven' is unclear about whether it means ages. Use 'from when I was five until I was eleven' to make the time span explicit. This clarifies the timeline and keeps past tense consistent.

× So coming back to Japan annually. it took about fourteen hours or so.

✓ So when we came back to Japan each year, it took about fourteen hours or so.

Original has a sentence fragment 'So coming back to Japan annually.' and improper capitalization after a period. Correct by combining into one sentence with a clear subject and verb: 'when we came back to Japan each year' and maintain past tense 'it took'. Use 'each year' or 'annually' but avoid the fragment form.

× Long distance flight traveling was usual.

✓ Long-distance flights were common.

Use the noun 'flights' rather than 'flight traveling', and form the compound adjective 'long-distance' with a hyphen when modifying a noun. Use 'were common' instead of 'was usual' to match plural 'flights' and sound natural. Ensure subject-verb agreement between 'flights' and 'were'.