Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer attempts to answer the question but has grammar errors, unclear word choices and redundancy. Aim for a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting details, and correct vocabulary. Use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so'), avoid repetition, and keep it under five sentences. Specifically, replace unclear phrases like 'enjoy loving scenery' with 'enjoy the scenery', and 'feel less degree by people' with 'feel less crowded' or 'less disturbed by other passengers.'

例: Yes, I usually prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy looking at the scenery. For instance, on flights I like watching the clouds and landscapes because it helps me relax and pass the time. Also, sitting by the window makes me feel less disturbed by other passengers, so I find it more comfortable.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains a wrong word ('page') and some repetition. Provide a clear topic sentence and a specific supporting detail (time, destination, activity). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'so' to make it coherent. Keep sentences concise and correct vocabulary such as 'village' or 'town' instead of 'page.'

例: Yes, we often had long road trips when I was a child because my relatives lived in a small town far away. For example, I remember long drives during summer holidays, stopping at roadside cafes and playing games in the car to pass the time.

× I kind of enjoy loving scenery while travelling because I feel more convenient and comfortable because I feel less degree by people around me in airplane.

✓ I kind of enjoy looking at the scenery while travelling because I feel more comfortable and less bothered by people around me on the airplane.

Errors: incorrect verb + -ing use ('loving scenery' should be 'looking at the scenery'); incorrect adjective use and collocation ('feel more convenient' -> 'feel more comfortable'); awkward phrase 'feel less degree by people' intended meaning 'less bothered by people'; incorrect preposition 'in airplane' -> 'on the airplane'. Suggestions: use 'enjoy' + verb-ing correctly (enjoy looking at...), use appropriate adjectives ('comfortable'), use common collocations ('bothered by people'), and use correct prepositions for modes of transport ('on the airplane').

× Of course, we used to have a long road trip when I was a child when we visited our relatives who lived in the page.

✓ Of course, we used to take long road trips when I was a child when we visited our relatives who lived in the village.

Errors: 'have a long road trip' is unnatural; use 'take a road trip' or 'take long road trips' for habitual past (used to); 'the page' is likely a wrong word, probably 'village' or 'town' — corrected to 'village'. Suggestions: use 'used to' with base verb ('take') for past habitual actions and choose correct vocabulary for place names; ensure number agreement ('a long road trip' vs plural 'long road trips') matches intended meaning.