Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 总体表达能被理解，但存在语法、用词和冗余问题。建议：1) 用单句直接回答后用一到两句具体说明，不超过5句；2) 改正语法错误（例如复数、介词、时态）；3) 删除口头语如“See.”并用连词连接原因；4) 提供更具体的细节（例如窗外景色或具体安全感来源）。示例修改重点是：自然衔接、准确词汇和具体原因。

例: Yes, I prefer sitting by the window when I travel. I usually choose the window seat on highways because I can watch the scenery and judge the traffic conditions. This makes me feel more comfortable and safer compared with sitting in the middle.

提案: 回答包含有用信息但时态和语法错误明显，且表达不够具体。建议：1) 使用正确时态（过去式）并避免口头语开头如“Well”；2) 先用一句主题句直接回答，再用1-2句具体细节（目的地活动、感受或记忆）；3) 用连接词提高连贯性；4) 使用更自然的表达替代机械翻译（例如“Sanya”前不加定冠词）。

例: Yes, I often went on long trips with my family when I was a child. For example, when I was six we spent a summer holiday in Sanya, where we swam on the beach and tried local seafood. It was unforgettable because I loved playing by the sea and my parents took many photos.

× Yes, I like to sit beside the windows when traveling.

✓ Yes, I like to sit beside the window when traveling.

句中“windows”用复数暗示多个窗户，但说法更自然的是指靠窗的位置——应使用单数“the window”表示“靠窗”。同时本句涉及特定位置（窗边），需用定冠词“the”。建议把“windows”改为单数并保留定冠词。

× For example, when I take the highways, I will first choose the windows beside.

✓ For example, when I take the highway, I will first choose the seat beside the window.

原句中“take the highways”不自然，应使用单数“the highway”或更常见的“take the highway”来表示走高速公路；此外“choose the windows beside”词序和搭配错误，英语中应说“choose the seat beside the window”或“choose the window seat”。建议改为“the seat beside the window”。

× See.

✓ You see.

单独用“See.”非完整句，口语里更自然用“You see.”或者更完整的表达“I mean”来引出解释。此处缺少主语，补上“You”。（列为一般现在时问题）

× In this way I gain a sense of safety.

✓ In this way I get a sense of safety.

“gain a sense of safety”虽能被理解但用法不够地道，常用动词“get”或“feel”更自然："get a sense of safety"或"feel safe"。建议使用更常见搭配。

× Well, yes, when I was a child, I often go traveling with my parents.

✓ Well, yes, when I was a child, I often went travelling with my parents.

描述过去习惯性动作时应使用过去时“went”，原句用了现在时“go”，时态不一致。注意英式拼写“travelling”或美式“traveling”，与上下文一致即可。建议把“go”改为过去式“went”。

× For example, when I was six years old, I went to the Sanya with my parents in summer holiday.

✓ For example, when I was six years old, I went to Sanya with my parents during the summer holiday.

地名前一般不加定冠词“The Sanya”不正确，应直接用“Sanya”。另外“in summer holiday”搭配错误，常用“during the summer holiday”或“on summer holiday”。建议去掉定冠词并调整介词短语。

× It is a unforgettable journey for me and I still enjoyed.

✓ It was an unforgettable journey for me and I still enjoy it.

句子时态混乱：先用过去时描述“was an unforgettable journey”，但后半句“I still enjoyed”使用了过去时且含义不明确。想表达“直到现在我仍然很享受/仍然记得”应用现在时“I still enjoy it”或“I still remember it”。建议把前半句改为过去时“was”并把后半句改为现在时“I still enjoy it”或“I still remember it”。