Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No/It depends), then give one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (tenses, articles, and word order) and avoid repetition. Aim for 2–4 sentences total.

例: It depends. For long journeys I prefer a window seat because I can relax and enjoy the view. However, on flights I usually choose an aisle seat so I can get up easily and stretch my legs.

提案: Answer directly, then add a clear specific detail with correct tense and a linking word. Use past tense consistently for childhood events and provide one concrete example (when, where, how long) to enrich the answer. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: No, I didn't have any long journeys with my parents when I was a child. The first long trip I took with my father was when I went to university, when we traveled by car for about six hours to move me into my dorm.

× It depends when I get a tween I would like to order a book a window seat but on plane, I'd rather booked a I'd rather book aisle seat when I'm traveling.

✓ It depends. When I get to the airport, I would like to book a window seat, but on the plane I'd rather book an aisle seat when I'm traveling.

Multiple issues: 'get a tween' is incorrect word choice and missing preposition; should be 'get to the airport' or similar. 'Order a book a window seat' has wrong verbs and articles; use 'book a window seat'. 'on plane' needs the definite article 'on the plane'. 'I'd rather booked a' is incorrect form: after 'would rather' use the base verb 'book'. Also 'an aisle seat' requires the article 'an'. Suggestions: use clear clauses separated by punctuation, choose correct verbs (book), include articles ('the', 'a', 'an') and use base form after 'would rather'.

× No, when I was a child I didn't have a long journey with my parents.

✓ No. When I was a child, I didn't have a long journey with my parents.

This sentence is mostly correct but needs punctuation for clarity. The past tense 'didn't have' correctly indicates a negative past experience. Suggest adding a period after 'No' and a comma after the introductory clause to improve readability.

× The first time I have a long journey with my dad is my university travel

✓ The first time I had a long journey with my dad was when I traveled for university.

The original mixes present tense 'have' with a past event. Use simple past 'had' and 'was' to describe a past occurrence. Also 'my university travel' is unnatural; use 'when I traveled for university' or 'during my university years'. Suggest using consistent past tense and natural phrasing for events in the past.