Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời nên trực tiếp, ngắn gọn và tự nhiên hơn. Người nói nên sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "traveling" và cấu trúc câu), tránh các mệnh đề rời rạc; bổ sung liên từ để làm rõ ý (ví dụ "because... so..."). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về cảnh vật bạn thấy để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn, nhưng không quá dài (tối đa 5 câu).

例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because I enjoy watching the scenery. For example, I like seeing green fields and rivers pass by, which makes the journey more relaxing. Also, sitting by the window helps me take photos of interesting places.

提案: Cần dùng thì quá khứ đúng (did/had) và cấu trúc câu mạch lạc hơn. Tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ "I had many long journeys" và "the one I remember most"). Bổ sung 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể về chuyến đi (ví dụ: activities, feelings, location) và dùng liên từ để nối ý.

例: Yes, I had many long journeys with my family when I was a child, but the one I remember most is a trip to the beach. We spent the day swimming and building sandcastles, and I felt very happy because we spent so much time together.

× A Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when traveling because I can see the overview of the picturesque scenery around my family car. Travel through many beautiful places.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when traveling because I can see an overview of the picturesque scenery as my family travels through many beautiful places.

The original contains sentence fragments and incorrect verb forms. 'Travel through many beautiful places.' is a fragment and lacks a subject; it should be integrated with the main clause. 'Overview' needs an article: 'an overview'. Also the phrase 'around my family car' is awkward for movement; use 'as my family travels through many beautiful places' to show concurrent action. Use present participle 'traveling' correctly after 'prefer to sit' and correct subject-verb agreement in 'my family travels'. Suggestion: combine clauses into one complete sentence, include articles, and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× When I was a child, I have so many long journey with my family but the most but I memorize the most is my journey to the beach with my family.

✓ When I was a child, I had so many long journeys with my family, but the one I remember most is our trip to the beach.

Tense is inconsistent: 'When I was a child' requires past tense, so 'have' should be 'had'. 'So many long journey' has a pluralization error: 'journey' should be 'journeys'. The phrase 'the most but I memorize the most' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'the one I remember most'. 'My journey to the beach with my family' is wordy; 'our trip to the beach' is concise and natural. Suggestions: keep past tense consistent, pluralize nouns correctly, eliminate redundancy, and use natural collocations like 'remember' and 'trip'.