Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğal fakat düzeltilebilecek birkaç nokta var. Kısa ve doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kullanıp ardından bağlaçlarla destekleyici detaylar ekleyin. Zaman kipine dikkat edin (şimdiki tercihler için 'I prefer' daha uygundur). Ayrıca 'by the window' ve 'near the window' ifadeleri arasında tutarlılık sağlayın ve tekrardan kaçının. Örnek: bir neden, kısa bir örnek ve bir sonuç cümlesi ekleyin.

例: I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because it's relaxing and I enjoy the view. For example, on long train journeys I often watch the countryside pass by, which helps me relax and makes the trip more enjoyable.

提案: Cevap mantıklı ancak tekrarlamalar ve dilbilgisi hataları vardı ('when I when we'). Geçmiş deneyimi anlatırken daha net bir konu cümlesi, bir veya iki spesifik detay ve sonuç belirtin. Bağlaçlar kullanarak cümleleri akıcı hale getirin. Örneğin, zaman ve yer bilgisi verin, sonra bir anıyı kısaça tarif edin ve duygunuzu ifade edin.

例: Yes, I did — my family and I took a long trip to Italy when I was a child. We visited Rome and Venice, and I remember being amazed by the ancient buildings and canals. It was a memorable experience and it made me enjoy travelling with my family.

× I will definitely prefer sitting near the window when traveling because it's very relaxing and you can see the landscape by the window.

✓ I definitely prefer sitting near the window when traveling because it's very relaxing and you can see the landscape.

The original uses 'will prefer', which improperly places a future-tense auxiliary where a present simple is more natural for habitual or general preferences. Use present simple 'prefer' to describe general preference. Also remove the repeated phrase 'by the window' at the end for concision. Suggestion: Use present simple for general preferences (I prefer) and avoid redundant phrases. Grammar problem type ID: 7

× I had a long journey with my family as a child when I when we were going to Italy.

✓ I had a long journey with my family as a child when we went to Italy.

The original sentence contains a repeated conjunction 'when I when' causing a sentence structure/wording error. Replace the repeated fragment and use past simple 'went' to match the past-time reference. Suggestion: Remove duplicate words and use past simple for completed past actions ('went'). Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I experienced brilliant things with them and I love spending time with them.

✓ I experienced wonderful things with them and I loved spending time with them.

The sentence mixes past tense 'experienced' with present tense 'love' though the context is a past childhood memory. Maintain past tense for both verbs: 'experienced' and 'loved'. Also 'brilliant' is not incorrect but 'wonderful' is a more natural collocation. Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense when describing past experiences. Grammar problem type ID: 6