Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and complete your final sentence. Keep answers natural but eliminate hesitations and ensure grammatical accuracy. Add a brief linking phrase to support the main idea and include one specific example to make it more concrete.

例: Yes, I usually choose a window seat because I enjoy watching the scenery pass by. It relaxes me and helps time go faster; for example, on a recent train trip through the countryside I took photos of colourful fields and small villages, which made the journey memorable.

提案: Correct obvious errors and avoid disfluencies. Start with a clear topic sentence, fix grammar (e.g. "yes, quite a few times"), use linking words for coherence, and give one concrete detail (a specific trip or activity) to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, quite a few times. My family and I often drove to different parts of Sri Lanka, so some trips lasted several hours. Despite being tiring, we enjoyed them because we listened to music and played car games together; for instance, on one long drive to Kandy we sang songs and stopped at scenic viewpoints for photos.

× I also like taking photos of interesting views along the way, particularly when I'm.

✓ I also like taking photos of interesting views along the way, particularly when I'm traveling.

The sentence is incomplete and missing the verb 'traveling' to complete the clause 'when I'm...'. This is a sentence structure error because the dependent clause needs a verb to be grammatically complete. Suggestion: always finish subordinate clauses (e.g., 'when I'm traveling', 'when I'm driving').

× Actually yours quite a few times.

✓ Actually yours should be: 'Actually, ours was quite a few times.' However, the intended meaning is likely: 'Actually, we had quite a few.'

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. It appears to contain a typo 'yours' instead of 'we' or 'ours' and lacks a clear verb or object. This is a sentence structure error. Suggestion: use a clear subject and verb phrase; for example, 'Actually, we had quite a few (long journeys).' or 'Actually, ours were quite a few.' Choose the form that matches the intended meaning.

× Although the journeys, uh, could be tiring, I actually enjoyed them because we talked, listen to music.

✓ Although the journeys could be tiring, I actually enjoyed them because we talked and listened to music.

The clause mixes tenses and has parallelism errors. After 'we talked' the coordinated verb should be past tense 'listened' to match 'talked' (past simple). Also include the conjunction 'and' to join two actions. This falls under incorrect verb form (present participle/past tense coordination) and sentence structure. Suggestion: maintain tense consistency in coordinated verbs and use 'and' to connect actions.