Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and directly addresses the question, but it is slightly repetitive and could be more concise and specific. To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, follow with one or two specific reasons or an example, and use a linking word to connect ideas. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., "vehicles" or "aircraft") and avoid repeating words like "car or plane."

例: Yes — I usually choose a window seat when I travel because I enjoy watching the landscape change. For example, on road trips I like seeing coastal views and passing villages, and on flights I enjoy cloud formations and cityscapes below, which helps me relax during the journey.

提案: Your response answers the question but is brief and a little informal. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, adding a concrete detail or feeling, and using a linking word to connect the duration and purpose. Replace vague phrases like "it was like" with precise language.

例: Yes, I remember one long family trip when I was a child. We drove for about eight hours to visit relatives on the other side of the island, and although the journey was tiring, I enjoyed stopping at roadside cafes and looking at the coastal scenery along the way.

× Yes, I do prefer to sit by the window when traveling, whether in a car or in airplanes, because I personally love to observe the objects and the nature outside while the car or plane is moving.

✓ Yes, I do prefer to sit by the window when traveling, whether in a car or on a plane, because I personally love to observe the objects and the nature outside while the car or plane is moving.

Use 'on a plane' not 'in airplanes'. For modes of transport, English typically uses 'in' with cars but 'on' with planes. Also 'airplanes' is plural while the rest of the sentence uses singular forms ('a car', 'a plane'); changing to 'a plane' keeps consistency and is more natural.

× Yes, I do remember we had a long journey, it was like about 8 hours and we went by car to see family and the other side of the island.

✓ Yes, I do remember we had a long journey; it was about eight hours and we went by car to see family on the other side of the island.

Run-on sentence corrected by using a semicolon. 'It was like about 8 hours' is informal and redundant: use 'about eight hours'. Write numbers under ten as words in formal responses. 'To see family and the other side of the island' is unclear; use 'to see family on the other side of the island' to specify location. Overall maintain past tense consistently.