Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 用更自然且语法正确的表达来回答，注意动词时态和主谓一致，修正拼写错误（如“lingerie”应为“long journey”或“train journey”）并避免多余或不完整的句子。可以先直接回答（主题句），然后用一到两句具体细节支持，并使用连接词使语句更连贯。例如说明具体看到的景色、什么时候更喜欢窗边座位或为什么不喜欢走道座位等。

例: Yes, I prefer a window seat because I find watching the scenery—such as the countryside and mountains—very relaxing. For instance, on long train journeys without Wi‑Fi, I enjoy looking out the window to pass the time and unwind.

提案: 回答需要更准确的时态和更清晰的句子结构，避免语法错误和不完整表达。先直接回答问题（有或没有），然后给出具体原因或一两个细节。使用正确的代词和时态（例如过去时），并把冗余词去掉。用连接词如“because”或“so”来增强连贯性。

例: No, I didn’t have many long journeys with my family when I was a child because my parents were often busy with work. As a result, I usually stayed at home, so I didn’t travel far with them.

× Also, when I travel by train on lingerie there are usually no Wi-Fi, so I looking out the window is a pleasant way to.

✓ Also, when I travel by train there is usually no Wi-Fi, so looking out of the window is a pleasant way to pass the time.

句中有多处问题： 1) “on lingerie” 显然是拼写或用词错误，应删除或改为正确的交通工具短语（此处已删除以保持原意）。 2) “there are usually no Wi-Fi” 属于主谓一致与冠词/不可数名词使用问题（Wi-Fi 常作不可数名词且前面用 there is），应改为“there is usually no Wi-Fi”。 3) “so I looking out the window is a pleasant way to.” 动词形式错误并且句尾不完整。根据上下文应使用动名词“looking”作主语或补语，且补全短语为“to pass the time”。因此改为“so looking out of the window is a pleasant way to pass the time.” 建议：注意动词-ing 形式在句中作主语或补语时不需要主语“I”；注意不可数名词和 there is/are 的搭配；检查拼写和无关词（如“lingerie”）。

× Honestly, when I was a child, there are no journey in my childhood.

✓ Honestly, when I was a child, there were no long journeys in my childhood.

句子时间是过去（when I was a child），谓语却用了现在时“are”，应使用过去时“were”。另外“journey”需用复数“journeys”或加限定词“a long journey”。同时“in my childhood”与“when I was a child”重复，可保留一种。建议：过去时间状语要用过去时，注意可数名词的单复数形式。

× My father, my parents are busy with their work and they're always me at home alone.

✓ My parents were busy with their work and they always left me at home alone.

原句有代词与结构错误： 1) “My father, my parents” 觉得重复且结构混乱，应直接用“My parents”。 2) “they're always me at home alone” 中的“they're” 意为“they are”，但上下文需表达“他们总是把我留在家里”，应使用动词“left”或短语“left me”，并且保持过去时。故改为“they always left me at home alone”。 建议：注意代词指代一致与完整的谓语结构；表达过去习惯用过去时（如 used to 或过去时的动词）。