Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I prefer the window seat.”). Give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because” or “so”), avoid repetition, and keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences. Also correct common mistakes: use “the window seat,” “it’s,” and proper verb forms (“when I travel”).

例: Yes, I prefer the window seat when I travel because I enjoy looking at the sky and scenery as we fly. It also feels more private and comfortable for resting, so I usually try to book that seat in advance.

提案: Answer directly and use past tense for childhood experiences. Begin with a clear sentence like “Yes, I often went on long journeys with my family when I was a child.” Then add one or two specific details (where you went, who helped you, or a memorable moment) using linking words such as “because,” “for example,” or “so.” Avoid vague phrases like “comfort area” and repeated words.

例: Yes, I often went on long journeys with my family when I was a child. For example, we used to drive to the countryside for summer vacations, and my parents helped me explore new places, so those trips are some of my happiest memories.

× Well, I prefer always window because the window seat is very fresh and and their sky they will window and I always see the sky.

✓ I always prefer the window seat because it feels fresh and I can always see the sky.

Errors: incorrect word order ('prefer always window'), missing article ('the window seat'), repeated 'and', use of 'their' and 'they will window' which are nonsensical. Use 'always' before the verb phrase or after 'prefer' as 'I always prefer'. Include the definite article 'the' for a specific seat. Replace unclear phrases with 'it feels fresh' and 'I can always see the sky' to convey intended meaning clearly. Suggestions: place adverbs correctly (I always prefer), use articles for specific nouns ('the window seat'), remove repetitions, and use clear verbs ('can see').

× So I always prefer for window whenever I traveling.

✓ So I always prefer the window whenever I travel.

Errors: incorrect preposition 'for' after 'prefer' and missing article 'the'. Verb form 'traveling' is incorrect for simple present when speaking about habitual action with 'I'—use base form 'travel'. Also use 'whenever I travel' for habitual situations. Suggestions: do not use 'for' after 'prefer' when followed by a noun; include 'the' for a specific seat; use simple present 'travel' for habitual actions.

× Yes, I am.

✓ Yes, I was.

Error: 'I am' is present tense and does not match the question about past experiences ('as a child'). Use past tense 'I was' to indicate the student was a child. Suggestion: match tense to time reference in the question; use past forms when talking about childhood.

× Of course, I have a long journey with my family as a child because there are comfort area and they will be help help me and their journey is very helpful.

✓ Of course, I took long journeys with my family as a child because they were comfortable and helped me; those trips were very enjoyable.

Errors: tense inconsistency ('have' present vs past context), singular/plural and article issues ('a long journey' vs repeated/general trips), incorrect noun phrase 'comfort area' and wrong pronoun 'their' misplaced, awkward 'they will be help help me'. Use past simple 'took' or 'went on' for past habitual actions. Use plural 'journeys' if more than one, or 'a long journey' if singular and consistent. Replace 'comfort area' with 'comfortable' (adjective) and express 'they helped me'. Suggestions: use past tense for childhood experiences, choose correct adjectives (comfortable), correct pronouns and remove repetitions.

× Yeah, thanks a lot for our example.

✓ Yeah, thanks a lot for the example.

Error: incorrect possessive pronoun 'our' — speaker likely means 'the example' given by examiner. Use 'the' to refer to a specific example. Suggestion: use correct determiners; 'our' implies shared ownership which is not intended here.