Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 在回答中要更自然和连贯，避免语法错误和多余的词。开头用一句话直接回答问题，然后用一到两句具体描述原因，使用连接词使句子更流畅。注意冠词和句子结构，例如不要把句子断在“the.”处，'such as'用法也要放在名词后。可以加入更具体的细节如看到的景色或感受来丰富内容。

例: Yes, I usually prefer a window seat because I enjoy watching the scenery pass by. For example, I like seeing green fields, rows of trees and colorful flowers, which helps me relax and forget about the stress of travelling.

提案: 回答应更符合时态并更清晰地表达原因和经历。第一句用过去时说明童年时没有长途旅行，随后解释原因时使用过去时态（couldn't afford）。接着说明长大后发生的事情时用现在完成或过去式，并添加具体细节使回答更丰富。同时避免简单句重复，使用连接词如 'however', 'later' 来衔接。

例: No, I didn't. My family couldn't afford long trips when I was a child, so we mostly stayed near home. However, after I grew up we started travelling together, visiting different cities and enjoying local food and sights, which was really enjoyable.

× Yes I do, because through the window I can see the. Plants and such as trees and flowers outside which makes me unwind after a long journey.

✓ Yes, I do, because through the window I can see plants such as trees and flowers outside, which helps me unwind after a long journey.

错误类型（现在分词/动名词使用）及相关结构：原句存在多处问题：1) “see the. Plants” 有断句和多余的定冠词导致名词短语不自然；应为“see plants”或“see the plants”。2) “such as trees and flowers” 的位置应紧跟“plants”以构成整体短语“plants such as trees and flowers”。3) 从句“which makes me unwind” 在此处更自然的说法是“which helps me unwind” 或“which makes me feel relaxed”；“helps me unwind” 更符合习惯表达。建议：把句子合并并调整定冠词和短语位置，使用更自然的动词搭配。具体改正见上。

× No, I didn't because my family can't afford my journey.

✓ No, I didn't, because my family couldn't afford to take me on trips.

错误类型（过去时）：面试者在描述过去的情况时要使用过去时态。原句中主句用了过去式（didn't），但从句用了现在时态“can't afford”，时态不一致且搭配不自然。应把从句改为过去式“couldn't afford”，并用更自然的动词短语“afford to take me on trips/afford trips”。建议在叙述过去经历时保持全句过去时。

× But when I grow up, I go outside for travel with my family.

✓ But when I grow up, I will go travelling with my family.

错误类型（将来时）：句子表达将来意图，应使用将来时态。原句用一般现在时“I go”不合适。更自然的说法是“will go travelling”或“I will travel”。另外“go outside for travel” 不地道，改为“go travelling”或“travel”更自然。建议使用将来时并选择常用搭配。

× I think the whole family together travels around.

✓ I think the whole family will travel around together.

错误类型（单复数和主谓一致）：原句“the whole family together travels around” 在主谓一致和词序上不自然。‘the whole family’ 作整体名词可视为单数，但在这里更清晰的是使用将来时“will travel”，并把“together”放在句末或紧跟动词后更符合英语习惯。建议调整语序并使用将来时以匹配上下文。