Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答自然且直接，但可以更紧凑并增加具体细节与连接词，使表达更丰富而不冗长。例如说明喜欢哪类景色、拍照的目的或频率，并用连接词衔接观点。注意句子数不超过5句。

例: Yes, I prefer the window seat because I love watching the landscape pass by, especially mountains and rivers. For instance, I often take photos with my phone to capture interesting views and share them with friends. Also, sitting by the window helps me relax and makes long journeys feel shorter.

提案: 答案直接但太简短，可补充更多具体细节（如行程时长、感受、与家人互动或记忆中的一个场景），并用连接词使叙述更连贯。此外“took many photos about the Palace Museum”可改为更地道的表达。

例: Yes, when I was six my family took a long train trip to Beijing that lasted about eight hours. I remember being excited to visit the Palace Museum and spending hours taking photos of the ornate halls and courtyards. My parents were pleased to see me so interested, and that trip became one of my earliest travel memories.

× I prefer to sit by the window since the scenery outside is really intriguing for me. What's more, I can take pictures by my phone appreciating the landscape.

✓ I prefer to sit by the window since the scenery outside is really interesting to me. What's more, I can take pictures with my phone to appreciate the landscape.

问题类型：动词 + -ing 形式与介词短语搭配错误。原句中“appreciating the landscape”放在句尾，造成结构不清，似为现在分词短语作伴随状语，但与前半句的主语并不自然衔接。建议用不定式“to appreciate”表示目的，或者改为形容词“interesting”更符合习惯搭配；另外“by my phone”应改为习惯搭配“with my phone”。改后更符合英语表达习惯。

× Yes, we went to Beijing when I was six years old by train. It was so exciting that I took many photos about the Palace Museum.

✓ Yes, we went to Beijing by train when I was six years old. It was so exciting that I took many photos of the Palace Museum.

问题类型：介词使用和短语顺序错误。1) 时间/方式短语顺序：更自然的顺序是先交代方式（by train）再交代时间（when I was six years old），或将方式靠近动词。2) “took many photos about the Palace Museum”中介词应为“of”表示拍……的照片，使用“about”不正确。修正后语序与介词搭配更符合英语习惯。