Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but slightly wordy and has a few unnatural phrases. Make the response more natural by using a concise topic sentence, avoiding repetition, and correcting small grammar/word-choice issues (e.g., 'watch over the beautiful sceneries' → 'watch the scenery', 'a very yes for me' → 'definitely'). Add one brief supporting detail using a linking word.

例: I usually prefer the window seat when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery outside. For example, the changing landscape and light relax me, so I find window seats more refreshing than aisle seats.

提案: The answer responds directly but lacks clarity and precise details. Improve by giving a clearer topic sentence, correcting place-name phrasing, and adding specific details (when, how long, what you did) with linking words to make the story more vivid and coherent. Avoid vague phrases like 'pretty fun' and 'capture the beautiful sceneries'—say what you saw or did instead.

例: Yes, I had a long family trip when I was about ten. For example, we spent two weeks visiting Cebu after a short stay at a theme park called Sticky Horror; during the trip I loved photographing beaches and limestone cliffs, which made the journey very memorable.

× I prefer to sit by the window when traveling because it allows me to watch over the beautiful sceneries and I tend to get refreshed every time I see the surroundings, so it's a very yes for me.

✓ I prefer to sit by the window when traveling because it allows me to watch the beautiful scenery, and I feel refreshed every time I see the surroundings, so my answer is definitely yes.

The sentence uses 'sceneries', which is not the standard plural; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not take -s. 'Watch over' is incorrect in this context; use 'watch' or 'look at' to mean observing views. 'Get refreshed' is awkward; native usage is 'feel refreshed'. 'It's a very yes for me' is informal and ungrammatical; change to 'my answer is definitely yes' or 'I definitely prefer that'. Suggestion: replace plural 'sceneries' with 'scenery', use 'watch' instead of 'watch over', use 'feel refreshed', and rephrase the final clause to a clear affirmative statement.

× As a child, I had a long trip with my family. For instance, we once went to Sticky Horror and then Cebu. It was a pretty fun experience because I was able to capture the beautiful sceneries and landscapes.

✓ As a child, I took a long trip with my family. For instance, we once went to Sticky Horror and then Cebu. It was a pretty fun experience because I was able to capture the beautiful scenery and landscapes.

The phrase 'had a long trip' is not idiomatic in English; use 'took a long trip' or 'went on a long trip' to describe travel in the past. Again, 'sceneries' is incorrect; use the uncountable noun 'scenery'. The rest of the sentence correctly uses past tense 'went' and 'was' and 'was able to capture'. Suggestion: use 'took' or 'went on' for trips in past tense and replace 'sceneries' with 'scenery'.