Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更直接且语言更自然；避免拼写和语法错误（如"spoil"应为不合适用词），并把句子简化在5句内。可以先给主题句，然后用一到两句具体细节支持，用连接词衔接，使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy watching the scenery because it helps me relax during long trips. For example, I often notice rolling hills and rivers that suddenly appear, which always surprise me and lift my mood.

提案: 句子需更清晰并修正词序与词汇（如"car bus"应明确是car or bus），并加入连接词使逻辑更顺畅。保持回答简洁并给出具体例子（拍摄对象、原因或技巧）。

例: Yes, I do, especially when I travel by car because the view changes quickly. I usually take photos to capture fleeting moments, and I especially like photographing mountains because their shapes and light change dramatically.

提案: 回答要先给明确立场，纠正拼写错误（"seed"应为"sea"），并用一两句具体理由支持偏好，注意句子连贯和自然表达。避免冗余和口语化不准确短语。

例: I prefer the sea because I grew up near the mountains and wanted a different kind of scenery. The coastline feels more relaxing and is ideal for long walks, which I find very romantic.

× I enjoy looking out the window because I often spoil it.

✓ I enjoy looking out the window because I often do so.

句中原本使用的“spoil it”不符合语境。考生想表达“我经常这样做（看窗外）”，应使用固定表达“do so”或直接用动名词短语“enjoy looking out the window”已完整。更改为“I often do so”避免误用“spoil”（毁坏）的意思。建议：遇到代替前文动作时用“do so”或重复相同动词短语。

× Unexpected beautiful landscapes such as rolling hills or rivers which surprise me and make the journey more relaxing.

✓ There are unexpected beautiful landscapes, such as rolling hills or rivers, which surprise me and make the journey more relaxing.

原句缺少主语和谓语，属于句子结构错误。添加“There are”使句子完整，并在非限制性定语从句前后用逗号隔开。建议：写完整句子要包含主语和谓语，必要时用“There is/are”引出存在的事物。

× Yes, but I travel by car bus.

✓ Yes, but I travel by car.

原句“car bus”词序混乱，缺少连接词或分隔符，导致句子结构不清晰。根据语境只需选择一种交通工具或使用“car or bus”。建议：如需表示两者之一写“by car or by bus”，否则只保留合适项。

× I prefer the seed when I grow up near mountains and I enjoy a different kind of scenery.

✓ I prefer the sea because I grew up near mountains and I enjoy a different kind of scenery.

原句有多方面问题：拼写错误“seed”应为“sea”；时态和从句连词使用不当。“when I grow up”用在过去经历应为“because I grew up”或“having grown up”。根据语境改为“because I grew up near mountains”更自然。建议：注意单词拼写，表述过去经历用过去时或完成时。

× The coastline feels more relaxing and is great for walking.

✓ The coastline feels more relaxing and is great for walking.

该句语法正确，无需修改。保持原句即可。

× I think that's so romantic.

✓ I think that's very romantic.

原句语法上可接受，但“so romantic”在口语中有时显得夸张或不正式，改为“very romantic”更中性且正式。建议：在正式表达中使用“very”替代“so”以保持礼貌和稳重。