Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 在回答中减少口头填充词（如 uh, um），并使用更简洁自然的句子结构。先用一句明确的主题句回答问题，然后用一到两句具体细节支持，例如说明哪些景色不同或让你觉得新鲜。注意句子不要过长，最多保持在3-4句内。

例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. The scenery often feels new and refreshing because it is different from my hometown — there are different types of buildings and more open fields. I enjoy watching these contrasts as they make the journey more interesting.

提案: 同样要去掉频繁的口头语，使用更准确的词汇（例如 remember, capture 而不是 recall/memory 作动词）。回答时给出一两个具体例子说明你如何拍摄或拍哪些景物，这会使内容更具体有说服力。保持2-3句即可。

例: Yes, I often take photos through the car window to capture the view and remember the trip. For example, I usually photograph interesting buildings or unusual landscapes so I can look back at them later.

提案: 回答要直接并用一到两句解释原因，避免语法错误和多余词汇（如 prefer liking）。注意表达原因时用连词如 because 或 so 并给出具体对比（比如环境、活动或感受）。控制在2-3句内，语言更自然。

例: I prefer the sea because I grew up in Chongqing, which is famous for its mountains. Since mountains are so common where I'm from, the sea feels more special and relaxing to me.

× Of course I would, uh, look out the window at the scenery, uh, because I think, uh, it's very special and, uh, fresh for me.

✓ Of course I would look out of the window at the scenery because I think it's very special and fresh to me.

句中原本有许多填充词“uh”，但主要语法问题不大。将“look out the window”改为更常见的短语“look out of the window”。此外，用“fresh for me”不太地道，改为“fresh to me”。总体建议：在口语中减少无意义的填充词，注意介词搭配和固定表达的地道用法。

× Uh, this scenery, uh, maybe, uh, different from my hometown and the, uh, place I lived.

✓ This scenery may be different from that of my hometown and the place where I lived.

原句主谓不一致且表达不完整。“This scenery maybe different”应为“This scenery may be different”。同时用“that of my hometown”来指代“我家乡的景色”，并用“the place where I lived”代替不完整的“the place I lived”。建议：注意助动词may的用法和正确表达所属关系。

× Uh, yes, I do like, uh, taking photos outside the car window because I want to, uh, recall everything and I'm afraid I would, uh, forget this landscape.

✓ Yes, I do like taking photos out of the car window because I want to remember everything and I'm afraid I might forget the scenery.

原句中“recall everything”在此语境下应使用“remember”，更自然；“I would forget”在表达担心将来忘记时用“might”或“will”更合适；“this landscape”改为更通用的“the scenery”。建议：选择更自然的动词（remember），并用恰当的情态动词表达不确定性。

× I want to, uh, memory it.

✓ I want to remember it.

“memory”是名词，不能直接用作动词。正确动词是“remember”。建议：区分名词和动词形式，使用正确的动词来表达记住的意思。

× Actually, I prefer liking the sea because I'm from Chongqing, a beautiful place where is known for, uh, kinds of mountains.

✓ Actually, I prefer the sea because I'm from Chongqing, a beautiful place known for its many mountains.

“prefer liking”是错误搭配，应直接用“prefer”；“where is known for, kinds of mountains”结构混乱，改为“known for its many mountains”。建议：熟悉动词搭配（prefer 后接名词或动名词但不与 liking 连用），并使用正确的从句和名词短语结构。

× So, uh, continues is very common on in my hometown, but the sea is special for me.

✓ So continuous mountains are very common in my hometown, but the sea is special to me.

原句“continues is very common on in my hometown”语法混乱。“continues”是形容词或动词形式使用不当，应表达“continuous/many mountains”或更自然“mountains are very common”。“on in”是错误介词搭配。并把“special for me”改为更习惯的“special to me”。建议：注意形容词和名词的正确形式，避免重复或错误的介词搭配，使用地道短语“special to someone”。