Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更自然、时态一致且信息更具体。注意使用现在时或常态表达（例如“I always watch”而不是“I always watched”），避免语句冗长或重复，用连词组织句子，并给出一两个具体细节（如你喜欢看什么场景、为何放松）。

例: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by bus or train because it helps me relax. For example, I enjoy watching city streets, old houses and trees passing by, which lets me forget my work for a while.

提案: 回答要更简洁并提高流利度与词汇准确性。用正确的短语（例如 “photos of the scenery” 或 “photos taken from the train”），避免语法错误和重复，提供一两个具体例子（哪类风景、拍照的频率或原因）。

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window. For instance, when I travel by train I like to photograph coastal views and old buildings, because the light and colours change quickly and it makes interesting pictures.

提案: 回答需更清晰、句子完整并纠正词汇和搭配错误。主句明确给出偏好，用1–2句支持理由并加入具体细节（例如附近的海滩名称、你做的活动）。避免语法错误如“It's very unfortunate to live”。

例: I prefer the sea because I grew up in Xiamen and enjoy the coastal atmosphere. The city has nice sandy beaches and warm sunshine, so I often go there to swim, have picnics and relax with friends.

× I always watched scenery when on the train or bus because it can release my pressure to watching the theory, such as the brush, the tree and some people in their house.

✓ I always watch the scenery when I am on the train or bus because it can relieve my stress from studying, such as the bushes, the trees and some people in their homes.

此句主要时态和动词形式有误。原句用“I always watched”为过去式，不符合“always”表示经常性的现在情况，应使用一般现在时“I always watch”。短语“on the train or bus”前需加主语或连接词，改为“I am on the train or bus”更自然。“can release my pressure to watching the theory”表达不地道：应使用“relieve my stress from studying”或“relieve my pressure from studying”。名词“brush”应为“bushes”（灌木），并改为复数“trees”。“some people in their house”应为“some people in their homes”。建议：把表示习惯的动词用一般现在时；使用常见搭配如“relieve stress”，“from studying”；注意可数名词单复数与固定搭配。

× I think it's very interesting to watch this and.

✓ I think it's very interesting to watch.

句子结尾多余“and”导致句子结构残缺，属于句子结构错误。删除多余的连词“and”即可使句子完整。建议：写作时检查句子结尾是否有多余连词或未完成的并列成分。

× In my phone there are lots of photos about the scenery.

✓ On my phone there are lots of photos of the scenery.

介词使用不当与固定搭配错误。“in my phone”通常用“on my phone”。“photos about the scenery”不自然，正确搭配为“photos of the scenery”。建议：记住常用短语“on my phone”和“photos of …”。

× One in the trains I like photograph very much.

✓ One of the photos taken on the train I like very much.

原句代词与名词搭配混乱。“One in the trains”不明确，应为“One of the photos taken on the train”。“I like photograph very much”语序错误和缺少被动/过去分词，改为“I like very much”或“I like this photo very much”。建议：用“one of the + 名词”结构，并用过去分词表示“拍摄于”。

× I'm passionate about it. I always find lots of time on it.

✓ I'm passionate about it. I always find a lot of time to spend on it.

短语“find lots of time on it”搭配不当，英语中应说“find time to do something”或“find a lot of time to spend on it”。此外“lots of time”改为“a lot of time”更自然。建议：使用固定结构“find time to + 动词”或“find a lot of time to + 动词”。

× It may be sound simple, but it is very interesting for me and I like to do it.

✓ It may sound simple, but it is very interesting to me and I like doing it.

“may be sound”是多余助动词be，正确为“may sound”。“interesting for me”更常见为“interesting to me”。后半句“like to do it”可改为“like doing it”与前句更连贯。建议：注意情态动词后不用“be”加动词原形；常用固定搭配“interesting to someone”和“like doing something”。

× I like the sea because I live in Xiamen. It a sea by city and there are brand beach and warm sunshine.

✓ I like the sea because I live in Xiamen. It is a coastal city with broad beaches and warm sunshine.

句子缺少动词“is”。“a sea by city”表述错误，正确应为“coastal city”或“a city by the sea”。“brand beach”应为“broad beaches”（广阔的海滩）。建议：注意主语后需有系动词；形容地理位置用“a city by the sea”或“a coastal city”，形容海滩用“broad beaches”。

× It's very unfortunate to live and I also like to picnic in the sea. There are.

✓ It's very pleasant to live here, and I also like to have picnics by the sea.

原句“It’s very unfortunate to live”词汇使用错误，likely intended “pleasant”或“nice”，“unfortunate”意思为“不幸的”。“picnic in the sea”不合逻辑，应为“have picnics by the sea”或“on the beach”。末尾“There are.”是残句，应删除。建议：选择合适形容词（pleasant/nice），以及使用正确介词“by the sea/on the beach”来表示在海边野餐；删除不完整句子。