Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答思路是好的，表达自然但存在语法和词汇使用问题（如“raise my pressure”不恰当），句子稍长且有重复。建议用更准确的词汇（例如“relax me”或“lift my spirits”），把信息分成两到三句话以提高清晰度，并使用连接词如“because”或“so”保持连贯。

例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or train. I enjoy watching the trees and buildings along the street because they relax me and make the journey more enjoyable.

提案: 内容具体且连贯，但存在小错误（如“take my phones”应为“take out my phone”或“use my phone”），以及时态和重复可以更简洁。建议用更自然的短句并加入连接词如“so”或“then”，同时提供一个具体的例子或频率词加强细节。

例: Yes, I often take photos when I see attractive scenery, so I usually take out my phone and capture the view. It's a hobby of mine to record special moments, and I often share the best shots with my friends.

提案: 回答理由明确但有部分表述不够地道或具体（例如“can contain anything”含义模糊）。建议给出更具体的理由或例子（如喜欢海边的声音、风景和活动），并使用更自然的短语连接意见与原因。

例: To be honest, I prefer the sea because it makes me feel free and relaxed. The vast horizon and the sound of the waves are calming, and I also love the blue color, which always cheers me up.

× ...many trees or buildings near the street can raise my pressure and make me feel comfortable.

✓ ...many trees or buildings near the street can raise my spirits and make me feel comfortable.

句中原用 raise my pressure 不合适。英文中的 pressure 通常指“压力（stress）”或“气压（blood pressure）”，而作者想表达“让我心情提升/愉快”，应使用短语 raise my spirits 或 lift my mood。建议用更自然的表达如 raise my spirits 或 lift my mood。

× Yes, when I see some pretty scenery, I will take my phones to take photos.

✓ Yes, when I see some pretty scenery, I will take my phone to take photos.

原句用複數 'phones' 與語境不符，學生指自己的一部手機，應使用單數 phone。這屬於冠詞/名詞數量使用相關錯誤，簡體中文說明：这里不是指多部手机，应改为单数 'phone'。

× It's one of my hobbies to photograph the beautiful scenes and record my life.

✓ It's one of my hobbies to photograph beautiful scenes and record my life.

原句中的 the beautiful scenes 在泛指爱好中的“美景”时，不需要定冠词 the，使用复数名词 beautiful scenes 更自然。此问题涉及可数名词的单复数及冠词使用，建议在泛指时省略定冠词。

× Also blue is my favorite color so I love the color of the sea too.

✓ Also, blue is my favorite color, so I love the color of the sea too.

原句语法本身主谓一致无误，但缺少必要的标点使句子读起来不够清晰。已添加逗号以改善句子结构和可读性。简体中文说明：虽然主谓一致正确，但建议加逗号分隔从句，使表达更自然、清晰。

× Definitely, I love to watch the scenery when I am on the bus or the train because I enjoy the beautiful scenes and many trees or buildings near the street can raise my pressure and make me feel comfortable.

✓ Definitely, I love to watch the scenery when I am on the bus or the train because I enjoy beautiful scenes, and many trees or buildings near the street can lift my mood and make me feel comfortable.

原句在时态上使用现在进行/一般现在时是正确的，但句子过长且连接词使用不当，造成表达混乱。将 'the beautiful scenes' 改为泛指 'beautiful scenes'，并把 'raise my pressure' 修正为 'lift my mood'。同时用 and 连接两部分并加逗号，符合一般现在时的表达习惯。简体中文建议：保持一般现在时描述习惯动作，同时注意适当断句和连接词以提高可读性。