Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và ngắn gọn. Hạn chế tiếng ậm ừ và lặp từ, trình bày câu chủ đề ngay từ đầu, sau đó đưa thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Sử dụng từ nối khi mở rộng ý (for example, because, so). Ví dụ: bắt đầu bằng một câu đơn thể hiện quan điểm (“Yes, I usually look out the window.”), rồi giải thích lý do hoặc nêu ví dụ cụ thể.

例: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing different landscapes. For example, I like watching fields and small villages pass by, which helps me relax during long journeys.

提案: Trả lời cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc: nêu câu chủ đề (“Sometimes I do.”), sau đó giải thích hoàn cảnh cụ thể và lý do. Tránh câu dài lủng củng; dùng từ nối như because hoặc when để liên kết ý. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (e.g. what scenes, when you take photos).

例: Sometimes I do take photos of the scenery outside the window, especially when I travel to rivers or countryside. I usually take pictures to keep the memory and because the views are often very beautiful and peaceful.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng: đưa ra quan điểm chính, sau đó giải thích ngắn gọn và cụ thể. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như “I live both” và dùng cấu trúc so sánh hoặc lý do (because, although). Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu. Ví dụ: nói rõ thích cả hai nhưng không thích leo núi vì sợ độ cao, và yêu thích biển vì cảnh đẹp và thư giãn.

例: I like both the mountains and the sea, but if I have to choose I prefer the sea because I find it relaxing. I enjoy beaches for swimming and sunsets, while I like mountains for hiking, although I don't enjoy very high climbs.

× Of course, umm, most of people when traveling by car or bus or uh, all other transportation that will uh, slip or umm, uh, use uh, the smartphone, but I think, uh, look at the window.

✓ Of course, umm, most people, when traveling by car, bus, or other forms of transportation, use a smartphone, but I think I look out the window.

The phrase 'most of people' is incorrect; use 'most people' (singular/plural collocation). 'All other transportation' should be 'other forms of transportation' to match countable/plural usage. Also the sentence needed pronoun 'I' and correct verb forms for clarity. Suggestion: say 'most people' and 'other forms of transportation', include subject 'I' before 'look'. Please note: Explanation in English as requested.

× Uh, sometime if you go to the stream umm, place, I will uh, take the photo at the scenery till umm, save the memory and umm, the beautiful scenery but.

✓ Sometimes, if I go to a scenic place, I will take photos of the scenery to save the memory of the beautiful views.

Use 'sometimes' (adverb) not 'sometime'; 'if you go' should match speaker perspective so use 'if I go' or restructure to general 'if you go'. 'Stream place' is incorrect — 'scenic place' or 'a place by a stream' fits. 'Take the photo at the scenery' should be 'take photos of the scenery'. 'Till save the memory' is ungrammatical; use 'to save the memory' (purpose clause). Suggestion: use correct adverb form, consistent subject, and 'photos of' + object. Please note: Explanation in English as requested.

× I prefer to enjoy both a beach and a mountain.

✓ I prefer to enjoy both the beach and the mountains.

The original mixes singular and plural inconsistently. When expressing preference for two types generally, use 'the beach and the mountains' or 'both a beach and a mountain' but the latter is less natural. Suggestion: use 'the beach and the mountains' to refer generally to both environments.

× Friendly speaking, I really don't want to climbing in a high place and the sea.

✓ To be honest, I really don't want to climb in high places, but I like the sea.

'Friendly speaking' is unnatural; use 'to be honest' or 'frankly'. 'Don't want to climbing' mixes 'to' with a gerund; correct form is 'don't want to climb'. 'In a high place and the sea' lacks parallel structure and connection; sentence needs contrast 'but I like the sea'. Suggestion: use correct infinitive after 'want to' and connect contrasting ideas with 'but'.

× The ocean is always so beautiful. So I live both.

✓ The ocean is always so beautiful, so I love both.

'I live both' is incorrect; likely intended 'I love both' (verb choice). Also ensure punctuation: combine into one coherent sentence. Suggestion: use the correct verb 'love' when expressing preference.