Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and directly answer the question first, then add one or two clear supporting details. Correct grammar and avoid redundant phrases (e.g. "see window"). Use linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car. I enjoy observing the landscape, especially in hill stations where I can see mountains and rivers. For instance, last year I watched rolling green hills and a winding river for most of the journey.

提案: Start with a direct yes/no, then explain briefly with specific examples. Fix grammar (e.g. "I love nature" not "nature person"). Avoid vague endings and keep within 3–4 sentences max.

例: Yes, I do. I often photograph animals, plants and flowers from the car window because nature relaxes me. For example, on a recent trip I captured a herd of deer and several wildflowers, which made the journey much more enjoyable.

提案: Answer clearly (mountains or sea), then give one or two specific reasons and an example. Avoid incomplete sentences and repetition. Use linking words like "because" or "however" correctly.

例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the fresh air. For example, when I visit a hill station I explore different trails and take many photographs of the peaks. However, I also enjoy the sea occasionally for relaxing on the beach.

× Well, I am fond of travelling to explore new places because I got a chance during travelling to see window and I can see through the view of nature such as in a hill station there are various mountains or rivers.

✓ Well, I am fond of travelling to explore new places because I get a chance during travel to look out of the window and see views of nature; for example, at a hill station there are various mountains and rivers.

Errors: inconsistent tense ('got' should be present 'get' to match 'am fond' and the habitual context); incorrect noun form and preposition ('during travelling' -> 'during travel' or 'while travelling'); awkward phrase 'see window' -> 'look out of the window' or 'look through the window'; 'see through the view of nature' is unidiomatic -> 'see views of nature'; run-on sentence and incorrect conjunctions. Suggestion: use consistent present/habitual tense, correct prepositions, and split or punctuate long sentences for clarity.

× Yes, absolutely. I take a lot of photos of the scenery by the car window because I love nature person and I took photograph of animals, plants and flowers which make me feel lighter and more comfortable as well as.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I take a lot of photos of the scenery from the car window because I love nature, and I take photographs of animals, plants, and flowers which make me feel relaxed and more comfortable.

Errors: inconsistent verb tense ('took' -> should be present 'take' to match 'I take a lot of photos'); incorrect noun phrase 'nature person' -> 'nature' or 'a nature lover'; 'by the car window' -> idiomatic 'from the car window'; 'photograph' count/noun form -> 'photographs'; 'lighter' is wrong adjective for feeling relaxed -> use 'relaxed'; trailing 'as well as' is incomplete. Suggestion: keep verbs in the same habitual present tense, use correct noun phrases, and choose appropriate adjectives.

× I usually prefer to see mountains. Whenever I go to hill station I get a chance to explore new places and I took many photographs of mountains. However, I when I go on vacation I also see.

✓ I usually prefer to see mountains. Whenever I go to a hill station I get a chance to explore new places and I take many photographs of the mountains. However, when I go on vacation I also visit the sea sometimes.

Errors: tense inconsistency ('took' -> 'take' to match habitual present 'usually prefer' and 'get'); missing article ('go to hill station' -> 'go to a hill station'); awkward/incomplete final clause ('I also see' is incomplete) -> clarify as 'I also visit the sea sometimes'. Suggestion: maintain present habitual tense, include necessary articles, and complete thoughts for clarity.