Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần nói câu trả lời một cách trực tiếp, ngắn gọn và ngữ pháp chính xác. Tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi chia thì, mạo từ và cấu trúc câu. Bổ sung liên từ phù hợp khi mở rộng ý và mô tả cụ thể hơn về việc chụp ảnh (ví dụ: chụp phong cảnh, chia sẻ vì muốn lưu giữ kỷ niệm).

例: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I enjoy watching the passing scenery and often take photos of interesting views. I usually post the best pictures on my Facebook or TikTok to keep memories and share them with friends.

提案: Cần sử dụng câu ngắn, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như thì và đại từ không phù hợp (ví dụ 'we remember'). Nên giải thích cụ thể hơn: khi nào bạn chụp, loại cảnh bạn thích chụp, và cảm xúc bạn muốn lưu giữ. Dùng liên từ để nối ý rõ ràng.

例: Definitely. I take photos to preserve memories of the places I visit. Whenever I look at those pictures later, they remind me of the atmosphere and how I felt at that moment.

提案: Cần đưa ra quan điểm rõ ràng ngay từ đầu (chọn một trong hai hoặc nói thích cả hai) và viết câu ngắn, mạch lạc. Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (động từ, mạo từ, cấu trúc) và dùng từ vựng chính xác để mô tả cảm xúc khác biệt giữa núi và biển. Thêm ví dụ hoặc so sánh ngắn để làm rõ lý do.

例: I like both, but if I had to choose, I prefer the sea because it makes me feel relaxed and free. The mountains are stunning and dramatic, but the sea’s open horizon helps me unwind and clears my mind.

× Of course yes, when I traveling by bus or car also look out the window at the sceneries and also take a lot of photos to on my story on Facebook or TikTok.

✓ Of course, yes. When I am traveling by bus or car I also look out the window at the scenery and take a lot of photos to post on my story on Facebook or TikTok.

The sentence omits the auxiliary verb 'am' required for the present continuous form 'am traveling' (Verb in the present participle form). Use 'traveling' with the correct auxiliary 'am'. 'Sceneries' is incorrect here; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun referring to the view. 'To on my story' is incorrect word order and preposition; use 'to post on my story' or simply 'for my story'. Also add commas and conjunctions to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'am/is/are + -ing' for present continuous, use uncountable 'scenery' for views, and 'post on my story' for the action of uploading photos.

× Definitely yes, it will help me save the memory and every time I look at the picture and we remember this scenery again and also. Feel the atmosphere.

✓ Definitely, yes. It helps me save the memory, and every time I look at the picture I remember this scenery again and also feel the atmosphere.

The original mixes future 'will help' with present habits; the question asks about current practice, so present simple 'helps' is appropriate (Verb in the past participle form flagged because 'remember' and 'feel' were fragmented). 'Save the memory' should be 'save the memory' or better 'preserve the memory' but grammatically present simple suits habitual action. The sentence also contains a fragment 'and also. Feel the atmosphere.' which should be combined into one clause. Use consistent tense and full clauses. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions, keep verbs in the same clause, and avoid sentence fragments.

× From my perspective, I refer both them because you know, the mountain often give it a sense of breathtaking scenery when the sea can also give me the sense of freedom and also that's the coming atmosphere.

✓ From my perspective, I prefer both of them because, you know, the mountains often give a sense of breathtaking scenery, while the sea can also give me a sense of freedom and a relaxing atmosphere.

Several pronoun and agreement errors: 'refer both them' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'prefer' and the object should be 'both of them' (Incorrect use of pronouns). 'The mountain' vs 'mountains' should agree with plural verb 'give'; use 'mountains give' or 'the mountain gives' consistently (subject-verb agreement). 'Give it a sense' is unnecessary—use 'give a sense'. 'That's the coming atmosphere' is unclear; 'relaxing atmosphere' or 'a calming atmosphere' is better. Suggestion: Use 'prefer both of them' for liking two items, ensure noun-verb agreement (mountains give), remove unnecessary pronouns like 'it', and choose clear adjective phrases for atmosphere.