Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ хороший и понятный, но можно сделать его более естественным и компактным: начните с чётного утверждения (topic sentence), затем добавьте одно конкретное объяснение или пример. Избегайте лишних слов и используйте связку для плавного перехода (например, "because" или "for example").

例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus because watching the scenery helps me relax and spot interesting local details. For example, I enjoy seeing small cafés and parks in suburban areas.

提案: Ответ понятен, но содержит ошибки в словах и немного повторяется. Исправьте опечатки (a photos → photos; scanner → scenery), сократите лишние слова и используйте связующее слово для примера (e.g., "for example" или "such as").

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because the landscapes are usually beautiful. For example, I like to photograph sunsets and riversides when I travel to the countryside.

提案: Хорошая структура: утверждение + объяснение. Улучшите фразы и исправьте ошибки (taking photo → taking photos), избегайте повторений и свяжите идеи словами (e.g., "however" или "but") для контраста. Можно добавить небольшой конкретный пример, чтобы ответ был более содержательным.

例: I prefer the mountains because they feel peaceful and offer beautiful views, and I often take photos there. However, I sometimes choose the sea when I want to relax and listen to the waves, especially during summer holidays.

× I enjoy looking out of the window when I travel by bus.

✓ I enjoy looking out of the window when I travel by bus.

No correction needed. The verb + -ing form 'looking' is used correctly after 'enjoy'. Keep as is.

× I like watching the scenery because it helps me relax and I can notice interesting details about different places.

✓ I like watching the scenery because it helps me relax and I can notice interesting details about different places.

No correction needed. The verbs and forms in the sentence are correct for the present tense and the structure 'helps me relax' and 'can notice' are appropriate.

× I often take a photos of the scanner outside the car window because the landscapes are usually very beautiful.

✓ I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because the landscapes are usually very beautiful.

The mistakes: 'a photos' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'photos' and 'scanner' is incorrect word choice. Remove 'a' before 'photos' or use singular 'a photo'. Replace 'scanner' with 'scenery' which correctly refers to views outside the window. Suggestion: use 'take photos' (plural) or 'take a photo' (singular) depending on intent.

× For example, I like to photograph sunsets or riversides when I'm traveling to the countryside.

✓ For example, I like to photograph sunsets or riversides when I'm traveling to the countryside.

No correction needed. 'Like to photograph' and 'I'm traveling' are correct present tense forms for habitual or current actions.

× I prefer the mountains because they are peaceful and very beautiful to me.

✓ I prefer the mountains because they are peaceful and very beautiful to me.

No correction needed. 'Mountains' is plural and agrees with 'they'. This sentence is grammatically correct.

× I enjoy taking photo of the scenery outside.

✓ I enjoy taking photos of the scenery outside.

Use the plural 'photos' after 'taking' because it usually refers to the activity of taking multiple pictures. Alternatively, 'taking a photo' is correct if referring to a single picture. The original singular 'photo' without article is incorrect.

× Sometimes I prefer the sea when I want to relax and listen to waves.

✓ Sometimes I prefer the sea when I want to relax and listen to the waves.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'waves' because we refer to specific sounds of waves at the sea. The verb + -ing form 'listening' is not necessary; 'listen to the waves' is correct. If using -ing: '...when I want to relax and listen to the waves' or '...when I want to relax and listen to the waves.'