Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Melhore a clareza e a estrutura da resposta: comece com uma frase direta que responda à pergunta, depois acrescente um ou dois detalhes específicos e use conectores simples (por exemplo, "and", "because", "so") para ligar as ideias. Evite hesitações e palavras repetidas, e corrija a concordância (por exemplo, "when I travel by car"). Pratique frases completas curtas (máx. 4–5 sentenças).

例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car or bus because I enjoy watching the landscape pass by. For example, I like to see changing weather and different kinds of trees and houses. I also find the sky especially beautiful during sunsets, which makes the journey relaxing.

提案: Torne a resposta mais natural e organizada: responda diretamente, explique uma ou duas razões específicas e use conectores ("because", "so", "for example"). Corrija erros gramaticais (por exemplo, "I like to have photos for memories") e evite demasiadas pausas e repetições. Limite-se a 3–4 sentenças claras.

例: Yes, I often take photos through the car window because I want to keep memories of interesting places. For example, I photograph unusual buildings and rural roads to share on social media. I try to capture good lighting, especially during golden hour.

提案: Dê uma opinião clara e explique por que prefere um ou outro usando detalhes concretos e conectores. Evite frases vagas e palavras incorretas (por exemplo, "especial" → "especially", "precolor" unclear). Use comparatives ou contrast words ("However", "but", "because"). Mantenha no máximo 4 sentenças coerentes.

例: I enjoy both, but if I had to choose I would prefer the sea because I love the open horizon and the sound of waves. However, I also like snowy mountains for hiking and the fresh air. Overall, the sea feels more relaxing to me because of the wide views and sunsets.

× Yes, I look, I love like look window, umm, at this scenery when they travel with the car.

✓ Yes, I look; I love looking out of the window at the scenery when I travel by car.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and subjects ('they travel' does not match speaker) and has awkward verb forms. Use the first person 'I' consistently. Use the gerund 'looking' after 'love' (Grammar Problem Type 8) and the correct preposition 'out of' or 'out the window' and 'by car' to indicate mode of travel (Grammar Problem Type 11). Suggested improvement: keep the subject consistent and use 'I love looking out of the window when I travel by car.'

× Yeah, the plane and the train Iloxi did naturally.

✓ Yes, I also enjoy looking from a plane and a train.

This sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. It has missing verbs and nonsense words ('Iloxi did naturally'). Correct by supplying a clear subject and verb and using 'also' for addition (Grammar Problem Type 26). Suggestion: say 'I also enjoy looking out of the window on planes and trains.'

× The sky I love so much.

✓ I love the sky so much.

Word order is incorrect: the subject and verb should come before the object complement. Place 'I' (subject) then 'love' (verb) then 'the sky' (object) for natural English (Grammar Problem Type 13). Suggestion: use standard S-V-O order: 'I love the sky so much.'

× Yes, I take many photos, uh, the roadside, the window car, umm, because I like have the photos from memory and I like posting my social media.

✓ Yes, I take many photos of the roadside and out of the car window because I like to keep the photos as memories and I like posting them on social media.

Multiple preposition and verb form errors: use 'photos of' for subject matter and 'out of the car window' or 'from the car window' (Grammar Problem Type 11). Use the infinitive 'to keep' or 'to have' for purpose and 'as memories' rather than 'from memory.' Also use 'post on social media' and include object pronoun 'them' for 'photos' (Grammar Problem Type 12). Suggestion: 'I like to keep the photos as memories and post them on social media.'

× Sometimes I like mountains, especial mountains with snow, but the same I love this year.

✓ Sometimes I like the mountains, especially mountains with snow, but the same I love the sea.

Pronoun and word-choice errors: 'especial' should be 'especially' (adverb) and the sentence 'the same I love this year' is incorrect and unclear. It likely means 'I also love the sea.' Fix pronoun/reference and use articles before 'mountains' (Grammar Problem Types 12 and 22). Suggestion: 'Sometimes I like the mountains, especially snowy mountains, but I also love the sea.'

× I like the precolor with the sea and sky together.

✓ I like the colors of the sea and sky together.

'Precolor' is not an English word; use 'colors' and use the preposition 'of' to link nouns (Grammar Problem Types 13 and 11). Suggestion: 'I like the colors of the sea and sky together.'

× It's beautiful.

✓ It's beautiful.

This sentence is fine as is. No grammatical correction needed. Keep as a short comment on appearance (Grammar Problem Type 26).