Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ неестественный и содержит ошибки грамматики и словообразования. Нужно прямо ответить на вопрос, использовать однотопиковое предложение, затем при необходимости добавить 1–2 предложения с подробностями. Обратите внимание на порядок слов, правильные формы глаголов и артикли. Например: начните с "Yes, I often/No, I usually don't", затем объясните почему и добавьте конкретный пример или настроение во время поездки. Используйте связки (because, so, when) корректно.

例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by car because I enjoy watching the changing landscape. For example, I like to see villages and fields pass by, which helps me relax during long journeys.

提案: Ответ повторяет фразы и содержит грамматические ошибки и неточные слова. Нужно дать короткое основное предложение, объяснить причину и привести конкретный пример (когда или что именно вы фотографируете). Избегайте повторов и используйте подходящую лексику (beautiful, amazing, interesting, lighting, composition).

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because the views are usually very beautiful. For instance, I like photographing mountains at sunrise because the light and colors look amazing in photos.

提案: Ответ короткий и содержит повторы и ошибки согласования (it’s → they/they are not needed). Дайте тему в первом предложении, затем расширьте ответ конкретной причиной и добавьте небольшой пример или сравнение. Используйте разнообразную лексику (peaceful, fresh air, hiking, waves, crowded).

例: I prefer the mountains because they are peaceful and offer fresh air and great hiking opportunities. For example, I enjoy walking on mountain trails and listening to birds, which helps me unwind more than a busy beach would.

× I like look window at scenery when traveling by car because you visited wait.

✓ I like to look out of the window at the scenery when traveling by car because I enjoy it.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure and verb errors: missing infinitive marker 'to' before 'look', missing prepositions 'out of' after 'look' and 'the' before 'scenery', incorrect subject/pronoun and unrelated words 'you visited wait' which make the clause meaningless. Suggestion: Use the infinitive 'to look', include the prepositional phrase 'out of the window', use the article 'the' with 'scenery', and replace the nonsensical ending with a clear reason such as 'because I enjoy it'.

× Yes, I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it's showing, because it's showing is so beautiful. And this I like. I like this.

✓ Yes, I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it is so beautiful, and I like it.

Errors: awkward pronoun use 'it's showing' is incorrect and unnecessary; repetition and unnatural word order 'And this I like.' Article use 'the scenery' is correct. Suggestion: Use 'it is so beautiful' to refer to the scenery, avoid redundant repetition, and use natural object pronoun order 'I like it'.

× I prefer the mountains because it's quiet and I I like this.

✓ I prefer the mountains because they are quiet, and I like them.

Error: Pronoun-verb agreement and pronoun choice: 'the mountains' is plural so use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'are' rather than singular 'it's'. Also remove duplicated 'I'. Use object pronoun 'them' for 'the mountains'. Suggestion: Match pronoun number to the noun and avoid repetition.