Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Улучшите грамматику и структуру ответов: используйте правильные формы глаголов (например, «I try», «instead of sitting on my phone»), давайте ясное топовое предложение и затем одно-два уточняющих предложения с логическими связками. Избегайте лишних слов и повторов.

例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when travelling by car. I try to enjoy the view instead of staring at my phone, because seeing different landscapes helps me learn about new places. For example, I notice cultural signs and architecture that tell me where I am.

提案: Сфокусируйтесь на чёткой причине и улучшите подбор слов: используйте корректные выражения («the photos turn out low quality», «I prefer taking photos while walking») и добавьте связку для логики («so», «because»). Не оставляйте предложение незаконченным.

例: No, I don't usually take photos from a moving car. The pictures often turn out blurry or low quality, so I prefer to take photos when I’m walking down the street and can frame shots more carefully.

提案: Дайте прямой ответ в первом предложении (например, «I prefer the sea») и затем подкрепите его конкретными деталями. Исправьте грамматические ошибки («I live by the sea», «it takes me about 15 minutes by car») и уберите междометия («uh») для более уверенной речи.

例: I prefer the sea because I live near the coast. It takes me about 15 minutes by car to reach the beach, and I enjoy the views and the fresh, clean air there.

× Yes I do, I trying to look out the window more often than I sitting in my phone while traveling by car.

✓ Yes I do. I try to look out the window more often instead of sitting on my phone while traveling by car.

The original sentence uses incorrect verb forms 'trying' and 'sitting' without auxiliary verbs. Use simple present 'I try' to match habitual action. Use 'sitting' appropriately after a preposition 'instead of' to show contrast. Also split into two clauses with proper punctuation. Suggestion: Use 'I try' for habitual actions and 'instead of' + verb-ing for contrasts.

× I usually travel in different countries to develop my country skill knowledge about different places.

✓ I usually travel to different countries to learn about different places and gain knowledge about them.

The phrase 'travel in different countries' and 'develop my country skill knowledge' are awkward and ungrammatical. Use 'travel to different countries' and clear verbs 'learn' and 'gain knowledge' to express purpose. Rearrange word order for natural English. Suggestion: Use clear verbs for purpose (to learn, to gain) and correct preposition 'to' with 'travel'.

× No I don't. I think that taking photos outside the car window makes the camera and result photo less cool quality.

✓ No, I don't. I think taking photos through a car window reduces the quality of the photos and the camera's performance.

The original 'makes the camera and result photo less cool quality' is ungrammatical. Express capability with 'reduces the quality' instead of 'makes ... less cool quality'. Also 'result photo' should be 'resulting photos' or simply 'the photos'. Suggestion: Use verbs like 'reduce' or 'lower' with 'quality' and use possessive 'camera's' or 'resulting photos'.

× So I prefer to take photo when I'm walking through the streets and different.

✓ So I prefer to take photos when I'm walking through the streets and exploring different areas.

The sentence ends with 'and different', which is incomplete. Use plural 'photos' and finish the phrase 'different areas' or 'different places'. Maintain parallel structure with 'walking through the streets and exploring...'. Suggestion: Complete vague adjectives with nouns and use plural for countable nouns.

× I prefer C because, uh, my home is near the sea.

✓ I prefer C because my home is near the sea.

This sentence is mostly correct but contains filler 'uh' and an unnecessary comma. Remove filler words in formal responses. 'Near the sea' is correct preposition usage. Suggestion: Omit filler words for clarity.

× Uh, to get to the sea, I should ride by the car over 15 minutes.

✓ To get to the sea, I need to ride in the car for over 15 minutes.

Use 'ride in the car' (not 'by the car') and 'for over 15 minutes' to indicate duration. 'Should' implies obligation; 'need to' or 'it takes' is better for describing travel time. Suggestion: Use 'ride in the car' and 'for [duration]' or 'it takes [time] to'.

× So I have leave at the sea and this is my home.

✓ So I live by the sea and this is my home.

'Have leave at the sea' is ungrammatical. The correct verb is 'live' and the preposition 'by' or 'near' the sea. Use present simple 'I live' for a permanent state. Suggestion: Use 'live by/near the sea' to describe residence.

× I like, uh, the view and clear air.

✓ I like the view and the clear air.

Add 'the' before 'clear air' for specificity and remove filler 'uh'. The structure 'the view and the clear air' is parallel and natural. Suggestion: Use articles for specific nouns and avoid filler words.