Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản và dùng từ chính xác; trả lời trực tiếp hơn, dùng câu chủ đề rồi thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể liên kết bằng từ nối. Tránh lỗi như "look on the windows" (đúng: "look out of the window"), "when I travel papers" (không rõ nghĩa), thì và dạng động từ ("I sometimes take photos"). Ví dụ cải thiện nên gồm tối đa 3-4 câu, có câu chủ đề + lí do + ví dụ ngắn.

例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because the scenery is usually very beautiful. I sometimes take photos of interesting views, such as forests or rivers, to remember the trip. Looking outside makes me feel relaxed and helps me pass the time.

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例: Yes, I really like to take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it often looks spectacular and peaceful. For instance, when I travel through the countryside I photograph rolling hills and small villages to capture the atmosphere. These photos help me remember trips and share them with friends.

提案: Nên chỉnh ngữ pháp nhỏ và dùng từ chính xác, đồng thời làm câu mạch lạc hơn bằng cách thêm linking word khi nêu ví dụ. Câu trả lời hiện tại ngắn gọn, rõ ràng nhưng có lỗi như "Clearwater varies" (nên là "clear water is"), "I went to the sea when with my family" (thừa từ). Có thể mở rộng 1 câu chi tiết nữa về hoạt động cụ thể.

例: I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and find the clear water very refreshing. For example, last summer I went to the beach with my family and we swam, walked along the shore, and watched the sunset, which made the trip very relaxing and memorable.

× Yes, I often look on the windows when I travel papers because the scenery is very beautiful.

✓ Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel because the scenery is very beautiful.

'look out of' or 'look out the window' is the correct phrasal verb; 'on the windows' is incorrect. Also 'travel papers' is ungrammatical and likely an extra word; remove 'papers'. Use singular 'window' when referring generally to looking outside while traveling. Suggestion: Use 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window' and omit unrelated words such as 'papers'.

× Sometime I taking photos of the views such as the motion and the pitch, so I very fun and relaxing.

✓ Sometimes I take photos of the views such as the motion and the pitch, so I find it very fun and relaxing.

The verb should be in simple present 'I take' for habitual action; 'taking' is incorrect here. 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes'. Also a linking verb is needed: 'I find it very fun and relaxing' or 'it is very fun and relaxing'. Suggestion: Use adverb 'Sometimes', simple present 'I take', and include 'find it' or 'it is' to link the description.

× Yes, I really like take photo of the scenery outside the car window, uh, because the scenery is very spectacular and uh, peaceful.

✓ Yes, I really like taking photos of the scenery outside the car window because the scenery is very spectacular and peaceful.

After 'like' use the gerund form 'taking' not the base verb 'take'. Also use plural 'photos' and remove filler words 'uh'. Suggestion: Use 'like taking photos' and keep the sentence concise.

× Sometime I often take photo of the motion and the driver uh, I feel.

✓ Sometimes I often take photos of moving scenes and the driver when I feel like it.

Sentence has structural issues: 'take photo' should be 'take photos'; 'motion' is unclear—'moving scenes' or 'motion' needs context; 'I feel' is incomplete—use 'when I feel like it' to express occasional action. Suggestion: Clarify 'motion' as 'moving scenes' and complete the clause 'when I feel like it'.

× I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and I find the Clearwater varies refreshing.

✓ I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and I find the clear water very refreshing.

'Clearwater' as one word is incorrect here; use 'clear water' or 'the clear water'. 'Varies' is wrong form; use 'very' to modify 'refreshing'. Suggestion: Use 'clear water' and the adverb 'very' to intensify 'refreshing'.

× Last summer I went to the sea when with my family and it was a memorable and relaxing trip.

✓ Last summer I went to the sea with my family and it was a memorable and relaxing trip.

Extra word 'when' is unnecessary and ungrammatical in this context. The rest of the sentence correctly uses past tense 'went' and 'was'. Suggestion: Remove 'when' to make the sentence grammatically correct.