Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 用词时态和表达需更准确，句子要更连贯并补全未说完的内容。可以先直接回答（肯定或否定），然后用一至两句说明原因并举例，使用连接词如“so”或“however”使衔接自然。注意时态一致（一般现在时）和完整句子。

例: I usually avoid looking out of the window because I get motion sickness, so I close my eyes or sleep to feel better. However, if the journey is long and I feel okay, I sometimes glance outside to enjoy the scenery, especially when there are interesting landmarks.

提案: 内容基本清晰，但部分表达不够自然，末句未完成且有语法和词汇选择问题。回答时先给出简短直接的肯定句，然后用一到两句具体说明拍摄的原因和例子，并用连接词（e.g., “for example”, “so”）保证逻辑。修正单复数、固定搭配（“sunrise and sunset”）和句子完整性。

例: Yes, I often take photos from the car because it lets me capture how the same place changes at different times. For example, I take shots at sunrise and sunset to compare the colours of the sky and the landscape, and I save them to see how the scene changes over time.

提案: 回答严重不连贯且出现词语错误（如“CD”应为“sea”），逻辑混乱且有自相矛盾的表达（既 relaxed 又 stressed out）。建议先直接表明偏好（mountains or sea），然后用2句说明理由并举例，避免相互矛盾的描述，使用恰当词汇如 “spacious”, “relaxed”, “peaceful”。

例: I prefer the sea because I find the coastline very spacious and calming. For example, I enjoy walking along the harbour and watching the waves, which helps me relax and forget daily stress.

× To be honest, I often got motion sickness when I traveled by car, so I often close my eyes and fall asleep to make myself better.

✓ To be honest, I often get motion sickness when I travel by car, so I often close my eyes and fall asleep to make myself feel better.

这里时态不一致：原句将一般习惯用过去式（got/traveled）和现在时（close/fall）混用。因为说话者描述的是现在的习惯，应使用一般现在时（get, travel），并且短语应为 "make myself feel better" 更自然。建议统一使用一般现在时来表达经常发生的情况。

× If the journey is long, I might glance outside to enjoy the.

✓ If the journey is long, I might glance outside to enjoy the view.

原句末尾缺少名词导致句子不完整（句子结构错误）。应该补上名词"view"（风景）或"the scenery"以完成意义。建议在表达“欣赏风景”时使用完整短语，例如"enjoy the view"或"enjoy the scenery"。

× Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures during the journey because it helps me capture different aspects of the same place and I can compare the color of the skies and landscape.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures during the journey because it helps me capture different aspects of the same place and I can compare the colors of the sky and the landscape.

存在名词复数和搭配问题："color of the skies" 不自然，应为复数形式"colors"且通常说法是"sky"（不可数或单数）与"the landscape"。将"color"改为"colors"并把"sky"改为单数更符合习惯搭配。建议注意可数/不可数名词及常用搭配。

× For example, I'll take pictures in different times like sunrise and sunsets, which makes the same look.

✓ For example, I'll take pictures at different times like sunrise and sunset, which makes the same place look different.

原句有多处问题："in different times" 应为"at different times"（介词使用），"sunrise and sunsets" 应一致为单数或复数且并列通常用"sunrise and sunset"，最后短语不完整，应为"makes the same place look different"。建议注意介词搭配、单复数一致以及补全句子成分以表达完整意义。

× I need to avoid the CD better because I think it's really spacious.

✓ I prefer to avoid the city because I think it's really crowded, so I like more spacious places.

原句中"avoid the CD better" 不通顺，疑为打字或词汇错误。根据上下文应表达对城市或某地的偏好和空间感，原句的"spacious"和"avoid"搭配不合理。建议改为明确的主旨句，例如表达偏好时使用"I prefer"并用恰当形容词（"crowded"或"spacious"）且保持逻辑一致。

× I enjoy walking near the harbor and watching the beautiful coastline, which makes me feel really relaxed and stressed out of my mind.

✓ I enjoy walking by the harbor and watching the beautiful coastline, which makes me feel really relaxed and takes the stress out of my mind.

原句中介词"near the harbor"可以改为更自然的"by the harbor"。此外，短语"relaxed and stressed out of my mind" 是矛盾且不自然，建议改为"relaxed and it takes the stress out of my mind"或"relaxed and relieves my stress"。建议注意介词搭配和正确表达“放松、缓解压力”的短语。