Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接但不够简洁与连贯。需要减少口头语（如 "umm"、"actually"）、修正语法（例如介词用法："outside of the window" -> "outside the window"），并用一两句补充具体原因或例子，使回答更自然且不超出五句。可以用连接词（because, so, therefore）衔接句子。

例: I usually don't look out the window when travelling by car because I prefer to play games or use my phone to relax. For example, on long journeys I watch videos or play mobile games to pass the time, so I often miss the scenery outside.

提案: 内容有意图但语法和时态混乱（如 "would to pay"、"took out"、不完整的结尾）。应使用简单、正确的时态（present simple/conditional）并补全句子。避免模糊词汇（"very shocking sceneries" 改为 "particularly striking views"）。保持最多五句并用连接词衔接。

例: Yes, I do sometimes. If I see particularly striking views, I usually take out my phone and take photos or short videos to record the moment, so I can watch them later at home.

提案: 回答含混且多次重复，词汇拼写错误（"seats" 应为 "seaside" 或 "the sea"），句子不完整且有过多犹豫词。建议先给出直接立场句（I prefer the sea），然后用两到三句具体、连贯的理由或对比（比如气候、活动、声音），并去掉冗余情绪化重复。

例: I prefer the sea because I don't like insects that are common in mountains. The seaside is more relaxing for me — I enjoy listening to the waves and swimming, which I find much more pleasant than hiking in buggy areas.

× Well, actually I do not often pay attention to outside of the window because I'm a little addicted to my phone and my video games during the journey on the car because, umm, I think the time on the car is important for me and it is a relaxed time for me.

✓ Well, actually I do not often pay attention to the view outside the window because I'm a little addicted to my phone and my video games during the journey by car. I think time in the car is important to me and it is a relaxing time for me.

问题类型：错误的介词或介词短语使用（ID 11）。 解释（简体中文）：原句中使用了不正确的介词搭配，主要问题有："pay attention to outside of the window" 应改为 "pay attention to the view outside the window" 或 "pay attention to what's outside the window"；"during the journey on the car" 和 "the time on the car" 都是不地道的表达，正确说法为 "during the journey by car" 或 "in the car"；另外语句冗长且重复，建议拆成两个句子，并把 "a relaxed time" 改为形容人的感受用现在分词或形容词 "relaxing"。改正建议：注意常见固定搭配（pay attention to + 名词/短语，by car / in the car），并保持句子简洁。

× Yeah, of course when there's some very shocking sceneries, I would to pay attention to it and took out my camera or maybe my phone to take some videos and photos to record the memories so that I can watch it back to my home when I.

✓ Yeah, of course when there are some very striking scenes, I would pay attention to them and take out my camera or maybe my phone to record videos and photos so that I can watch them back at home later.

问题类型：错误的介词/数和代词使用（ID 11 兼涉及复数/代词选择）。 解释（简体中文）：原句中 "there's some very shocking sceneries" 有两个问题："there's"（there is）与复数名词不一致，且 "sceneries" 用法不自然，应改为复数可数名词 "scenes"；"I would to pay" 中多了 to，应为 "I would pay" 或直接 "I will pay"；"took out my camera" 时态混乱，应与条件保持一致用不带过去式的动词如 "take out"；"record the memories so that I can watch it back to my home when I." 代词和介词错误，应该用复数代词 "them" 对应 "videos and photos"，并用 "watch them back at home" 或 "watch them back when I get home"。改正建议：注意主谓一致（there are），动词原形与情态结构，以及代词与先行词的数一致；使用自然搭配 "at home/when I get home"。

× Hmm, well, I think both of them are really great, but for me, I do prefer seats because in the mountains they're so insects. I hate insects, especially mosquitoes. I really hate them. But in the sea, uh, beside the sea, it's much better and but it's also very, umm, the sound is very.

✓ Hmm, well, I think both of them are really great, but for me, I prefer the sea because in the mountains there are so many insects. I hate insects, especially mosquitoes. But by the sea it's much nicer, and the sound of the waves is very relaxing.

问题类型：代词和数量表达错误（ID 12 与 ID1 关联）。 解释（简体中文）：原句有多处问题："I do prefer seats" 应为 "I prefer the sea"（拼写和词汇错误，sea 与 seat 混淆）；"in the mountains they're so insects" 结构错误且缺少数量词，应为 "there are so many insects"；使用代词时要与名词一致（they/there 混用造成歧义）。句尾 "it's also very, umm, the sound is very." 不完整，需要补全为 "the sound of the waves is very relaxing" 或类似表达。改正建议：注意单词拼写（sea vs seat），使用存在句 "there are + 数量" 来描述存在的事物，并完整表达句子意思，避免口语填充词打断句子。