Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答结构清晰，也提供了具体高度和原因。不过，“ancient Arctic facts”用词不准确，应该根据语境使用“ancient artefacts”或“archaeological remains”。另外，原因信息稍显复杂，Part 1中可以用更自然、简洁的表达，并确保因果关系清楚。

例: No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home. Most of them are only four to six storeys high because archaeologists discovered some ancient artefacts in the area. As a result, strict planning rules were introduced to protect the site.

提案: 答案内容丰富，回答直接，并使用了“so”和“For instance”来连接细节，逻辑较好。“strike buildings”应改为“striking buildings”，因为“striking”表示引人注目的。此外，“capture the moment”在这里不如“capture their beauty”或“record my memories”自然。

例: Yes, I do. I’m a big fan of architecture, and I’m especially drawn to striking buildings from both Eastern and Western traditions. When I travel, I often photograph them to capture their beauty, particularly their ornate façades, carved patterns, and unusual materials.

提案: 回答有明确对象和理由，但存在较多语法和搭配问题。“have a visit to Eiffel Tower”应改为“visit the Eiffel Tower”，“the Eiffel Tower”需要定冠词；“I’m desperately want to see it”应改为“I desperately want to see it”。“say it”意思错误，应使用“see it”或“visit it”。同时需要添加标点并避免使用不自然的“and I mean”。

例: I’d love to visit the Eiffel Tower in the future. I haven’t been to Paris yet, but the tower is an iconic landmark and a symbol of French culture. I’d really like to see it in person and enjoy the view from the top.

提案: 答案表达了清晰的立场，也使用了“Although”进行让步，结构基本完整。但“a much more magnificent scenery”应改为“much more magnificent scenery”或“a much better view”；“dun height”应改为“such a height”或“that height”；“make”应与动名词短语保持一致，改为“makes”；“a tall build”应改为“a tall building”。

例: Actually, I don’t think I would. Although I could enjoy a much better view from a high floor, living at such a height would make me feel a little unsafe. Therefore, I’d probably choose a low- or medium-rise building instead.

× Actually, I'm a big fan of architecture and I'm especially drawn to strike buildings from both Eastern and Western traditions, so while I travel I often photograph them to capture the moment.

✓ Actually, I'm a big fan of architecture, and I'm especially drawn to striking buildings from both Eastern and Western traditions, so while I travel, I often photograph them to capture the moment.

“strike”不能直接作形容词修饰“buildings”。这里需要使用现在分词“striking”，表示“引人注目的、令人印象深刻的”。另外，两个独立分句由“and”连接时，加逗号可以使句子结构更清晰。

× I want to have a visit to Eiffel Tower in the future.

✓ I want to visit the Eiffel Tower in the future.

“Eiffel Tower”是一个特定的建筑物名称，前面通常要加定冠词“the”。同时，“visit”可以直接作动词使用，因此“have a visit to”可以改为更自然的“visit”。

× I haven't been to Paris yet and I mean that tower is iconic It's basically a symbol of Western culture, so I'm desperately want to say it.

✓ I haven't been to Paris yet, and I mean, that tower is iconic. It's basically a symbol of Western culture, so I desperately want to see it.

“I'm desperately want”把系动词“am”和普通动词“want”错误地放在一起。应该使用“I desperately want”，或者说“I am desperate to see it”。原句中“iconic”和后面的句子之间也缺少清晰的句号或逗号，需要分成两个句子。

× Although I can enjoy a much more magnificent scenery from a high floor, staying at dun height make me feel a bit unsafe.

✓ Although I can enjoy much more magnificent scenery from a high floor, staying at such a height makes me feel a bit unsafe.

“scenery”通常是不可数名词，不能使用“a”修饰，因此应删除“a”。“dun height”不是正确表达，应该说“such a height”。此外，动名词短语“staying at such a height”作主语时看作单数，所以后面的动词要使用“makes”。

× Although I can enjoy a much more magnificent scenery from a high floor, staying at dun height make me feel a bit unsafe.

✓ Although I can enjoy much more magnificent scenery from a high floor, staying at such a height makes me feel a bit unsafe.

“staying at such a height”是一个动名词短语，整体作单数主语，因此谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式“makes”，不能使用“make”。