Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接且相关，但有语法和用词错误，句子较长未分段，缺少衔接词。建议：用简短的主题句开头，修正语法（e.g. 'which located' 改为 'which are located' 或用定语从句简化），并补充一两条具体细节，如数量或功能，保持最多5句。

例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. They are mostly skyscrapers located in the city center, about twenty or so. I find them attractive because of their modern glass facades and bright lights at night. I often enjoy walking there to admire the architecture.

提案: 回答有明确理由但语法和表达不自然（如 'which from my friends'，'I'm very enjoy about it'）。建议使用更地道的短句并用衔接词连接原因与结果，提供具体频率或场合。

例: Yes, I do. I often take photos of interesting buildings to post on social media, especially when I'm traveling. I usually receive lots of comments from friends and family, which makes me happy and encourages me to take more pictures.

提案: 回答内容有趣且具体，但有多处语言错误（如 'which shaped as a toilet', 'so many people don't like this', 'talk a photo'）。建议改用准确的语法描述建筑特色，说明原因并举例你的感受或经历。

例: Yes. There is a peculiar tall building in Zhuhai that is famously shaped like a toilet. Although some people criticize its design, I find it amusing and memorable. When I visited, I took several photos and enjoyed the unusual architecture.

提案: 回答表达意图明确但语法错误严重且结尾不完整（如 'appreciate it attractive views', 'beautiful city which located in our center', 'have a relaxed and. Over the moon'）。建议用一到两句清楚说明原因并给出具体细节（如高楼的视野、安全或便利性），避免片段句。

例: Yes, I would. Living in a tall building would give me great views of the city center and plenty of natural light. I also think high-rise apartments are convenient and often safer, which would help me feel relaxed and happy.

× Yes, of course, in my hometown there are so many skyscrapers which located in our city center.

✓ Yes, of course. In my hometown there are many skyscrapers which are located in our city center.

句子使用了 there are 的结构，但关系从句中动词缺失。需要在 which 与 located 之间加上系动词 are，构成被动或定语从句的完整谓语。另外将 so many 改为 many 更自然（非语法错误，但更符合口语书面表达）。建议在从句中保证动词完整或使用被动结构："which are located"。

× I think they are very beautiful and attractive for me.

✓ I think they are very beautiful and attractive to me.

中文常说“对我有吸引力”对应英语短语是 attractive to me，而不是 attractive for me。修正为 to 表示对某人的感受或影响。

× Yes, of course, because I want to post them on my social media and I may get so many comments which from my friends and family members, I'm very enjoy about it.

✓ Yes, of course, because I want to post them on my social media and I may get many comments from my friends and family members. I really enjoy it.

原句中存在多处错误：1) which from my friends... 中不需要 which，应使用介词短语 from my friends...（参见介词错误与关系代词混用）。2) so many 在此可改为 many 更自然；3) I'm very enjoy about it 是错误的动词搭配，enjoy 是及物动词，不用被动或带 about，用 I really enjoy it 或 I enjoy it very much。建议把句子拆成两句更清晰。

× Yes, of course. I remember that in Zhuhai there is a tall building which shaped as a toilet.

✓ Yes, of course. I remember that in Zhuhai there is a tall building which is shaped like a toilet.

关系从句中缺少系动词 is，且英语中常用 shaped like 来表示“形状像……”，不是 shaped as。应使用 "which is shaped like a toilet"。

× Although it is a landmark and so many people don't like this, I love appreciating it and I also talk a photo with them.

✓ Although it is a landmark and many people don't like it, I love it and I also took a photo with it.

存在代词使用和动词时态及搭配错误：1) don't like this → don't like it，this 用法不自然，应使用 it 指代建筑；2) love appreciating it 不自然，通常说 I love it 或 I enjoy appreciating it，但更简洁为 I love it；3) talk a photo 是错误表达，应为 take a photo；4) with them → with it，因为拍的是建筑（单数）。时态改为 took 如果是过去发生的行为。建议使用正确代词并使用常见动词搭配。

× Yes, I do because when I live in a tall building I can appreciate it attractive views and I can see beautiful city which located in our center.

✓ Yes, I do because when I live in a tall building I can appreciate its attractive views and I can see the beautiful city which is located in our center.

句子问题包括：1) possessive pronoun 错用，it attractive views 应为 its attractive views；2) 缺少定冠词，beautiful city 前应有 the 如果特指市中心的城市景观；3) which located... 缺少系动词 is，应为 which is located；整体为现在时描述，需保证主谓一致和完整从句。

× So it's a good chance for me to have a relaxed and. Over the moon.

✓ So it's a good chance for me to relax and feel over the moon.

原句结构不完整并且断句错误："to have a relaxed" 后缺少名词或动词形式，且句尾的 "Over the moon." 断成短语。应改为不定式结构 to relax 或 to have a relaxed time，并把 over the moon 与动词连用，例如 feel over the moon，表示非常高兴。建议使用完整谓语和连贯句子。